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    dots Submission Name: WTFdots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 974
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1100



    Description:
       I wrote this cuz me and my friends were just fuckin around writting stupid shit and stuff


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    dotsWTFdots
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    Smoking is bad
    Drugs are good
    Drinkings relaxing
    But we never should

    Preps are annoying
    Jock are fun
    Except when they yell
    "we're number one"

    Benladin's my hero
    Homework suxs
    We love our country
    Where bombs mean good luck

    They say Im an American
    No worries it's a lie
    Yeah! Bush is president
    Hope your ready to die

    Teachers are mean
    Pimps are cool
    We've got prostitutes
    In our school

    I love my school
    I've never lied
    Cant wait for the bell
    So I can commit suicide

    I curse and steal
    It's the American way
    I go to my boyfriends house
    And stay all day

    Yeah go team
    may-b you'll win this time
    You'll be our future soldiers
    on the frontline

    In a couple days
    Maybe we'll have a world war
    Uh oh Bush is pregnant
    I guess the rubber tore.




    Submitted on 2005-09-01 06:17:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a bit to randome for me seems like it may have worked better if you eather divided your rants into sections or just set up poem for each one
    it might have a better laugh on on the individual issues rather than tossing in a bunch of one liners to cover a lot of bases
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by Patricio | [ Reply to This ]
      ha this was realy funny. i espesaly like the part where your like weve got prostatuts in our schools.i also like the part where you said he was pregnant. this was funny funny stuff my freind.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahah I like this, it made me laugh. You made it rhyme perfectly. Good job, I'm sure many people would get a good laugh out of this. And my gawd unforgiving05 , chill! This is a comedy poem, meant to make people laugh, not flip out. You should have read the desc. and the class before that comment.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      stormy skies is right about ignoring unfirgivings comment if he had been paying attention he wouldhave see that this is a COMEDY! which i thought was funny...and i can relate to afew of the things you said about school...you should meet serenity blade yo ushare some of the same views


    funny funny person you are,
    Misty
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by mistakes | [ Reply to This ]
      ignore the last comment lol... it is obvious that this is satire and i think you have done a good job...and without meaning to be ageist lol i think that you could improve this even more in years to come...but for where you are at and your age...you have done very well...and that takes nothing away from your piece or your thoughts :) or isnt mean that way anyways...hope you get what i mean...
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      For one thing your not president and that is apparently a GREAT thing because you do not know [censored] about our counrty..yea you diss Bush Like he is the worst president but our country wouldn't even be together anymore if Kerry had won..And the part were you said Binladen was your hero tells us that you are a Mother [censored]ing Son of a Bitch that doesn't have any morals or even cares about human life. Maybe you don't remember that he sent his followers to kill thousands of Americans and people from other nationalities some were even children. So before you go and talk bull[censored] about our country and our president you might want to wise the [censored] up, or atleast do some research so you know what the [censored] you're talking about.In conclusion, you might wanna consider doing what you said in the 6th stanza.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by unforgiving05 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, for once a cute smarty pants poem that makes sense, even if I donít like it, I can say it has merit, one ding-a-ling class is over. Tom
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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