Description: Sorry, structure isn't my big thing here. I just needed to write a sappy poem to lift my spirits up a bit. I apologize if this is generic, but hey we need to write those every once in awhile.
Writer's block has a very strong hold on me right now, but your thoughts are always appreciated and help make all of us better at our craft!
The Beauty of Love -------------------------------------------
Somewhere deep inside
there is this space.
It can never be filled,
it can only grow-
This unseen place,
the foundation on which
love finds it's permanent home.
It's different than that of your heart-
almost as powerful as your soul.
The voice which reminds you
when you're down,
you've got a reason to live.
It's so strong-
it can lift you high into heaven,
bring you gently back down to earth.
Love resides in this place,
this infinite space.
Forever without end-
the true beauty of love.
Hmmm... I found your description at the beginning of this piece to be very interesting. I was expecting in a sense a fairly mediocre piece of writing, yet I found it very well written and crafted piece.
You have done very well in this, keep up the good work and have a blessed day. And indeed that is the beauty of love.
lovely, lovely, i love love poems... can i possibly say love any more times, i love how love poems are so happy and yet so sad... and how people interpret them differently because of different life experiences. i like the little spot u spoke of... like everyone has it... and it's set aside for love... like theres a reserved sign there or something, it's sweet. i like the line "you've got reason to live" love lifts us up, it truely does in the most amazing way... but then theres the other side of it... lets not talk about that, andyways i enjoyed reading this poem... it's veri sweet and it makes me think about things.
Oooh you trying to ENTICE us or what..This is a wonderfully crafted piece..You have breathed the beauty of love into this write..IT LIFTED MY SPIRIT IMMENSELY...I needed to be reminded of this element of love, that trully does make life really worthwhile..This is such a marvelously crafted piece...I appreciated the simplicity of the write..You used comprehensible words to express an incredible emotion..You killed me with the harmony...There's so much syncronity in this piece...I literally danced to the rhythm of this sagacious write...This is a sweet piece...A greatly enjoyed write...So soothing...Thank you for sharing!Be happy..Nobantu
i love the idea of that space inside you that can never be filled but only grows to contain more love. to me it's that Divine love, that all-encompassing love that is always there deep inside of us to sustain us on our path through life.
i didn't find this generic at all, nor was it sappy. it's a reminder to us all that love lives inside us and is there for sharing and growing. thanks!
I am a firm believer that "love poems" are, how did hyproglo put it - "cheesy" - but that would be because I'm single and have no life, yet...however as much as i say I dont like them, I am forever attracted to them and do so like them when i'm reading something that is good.
Honestly, there is nothing generic about this, and it is very well written - writer's block seems to work well for you. My mind is in overdrive if you need any suggestions... Lisa
This was sweet and uplifting. Hope some of the younger members read this, they are so easily despairing! I like the idea of loves place being special and Infinite(sp). I was reminded of a line from Michael Bolton song
"I said I loved you but I was wrong 'Cause love could never feel this strong!"
This is powerful and beautiful. Forget sounding generic. There is always someone out there who will find that one line in there to help them through the day. Beautiful...When writing about love, it's most always going to seem generic....
Ahhhh...!This is just beautiful! Reading this poem just made me smile! How warm and sincere this is! Love can be a wonderful thing can't it. (well it can really f*ckin suck too but this poem is not about that so...)Ahhhh...!I love how you wrote this! I like how you call it "this space". That is really good! Not your heart or your soul but somewhere else! Hmmm...gets me thinking and still smiling! It is a neverending space too which is awesome too! I have nothing but compliments for this poem of yours Candi. It is lovely in every sense of the word and this feeling you have so wonderfully described is a priceless feeling! You have captured the "true beauty of love" within this poem! Awesome! Take care!
this is really neat. very original. you have explained the determination and strength of the soul and shown us where it is!
The voice which reminds you when you're down, you've got a reason to live. It's so strong- it can lift you high into heaven, bring you gently back down to earth. Love resides in this place, this infinite space.
those were definitely my favorite lines, but the whole poem is really good and quite well done. nice work.