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    dots Submission Name: Don't Forgetdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 374
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I want to be remembered. I want all the good times to be remembered.


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    dotsDon't Forgetdots
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    Do you remeber all those times
    That we laughed together?
    And do you remember those letters you wrote
    That said we were forever?
    Do you remember, when I was gone,
    All you wanted was me in your arms?
    And the heat between us was always so intense
    It could probably set off alarms.
    Do you remember our first kiss,
    Or that dance in the parking lot?
    Do you remember my clover chains,
    Or that tiny yellow rose you bought?
    Do you remember how it feels
    To love a girl like me?
    Do you remember the magic we had,
    Or how happy we used to be?
    Do you remember visiting my dorm,
    Meeting my crazy friends?
    Do you remember the love we shared?
    Did you think that it would ever end?
    Do you remember that promise you made?
    How when you broke it, you cried?
    Do you remember how I took so long to tell you
    About the love for you that I tried to hide?
    Do you remember our last Christmas together,
    And how your gift brought tears to my eyes?
    And do you remember all those toys from the crane machine,
    That you won with only a few tries?
    Do you remember the day we spent on the lake,
    When everything was perfect and right?
    Do you remember that skirt I wore
    The first time you spent the night?
    Do you remember that special dress
    That you bought for my birthday?
    Do you remember our late night rides,
    Or that question game we used to play?
    Do you remember that Fourth of July
    That we spent underneath the stars?
    Do you remember listening to
    My stepdad play the guitar?
    Do you remember having a home together?
    Do you remember the bed that we shared?
    And do you remember those dreams I would have,
    And how you comforted me when I was scared?
    Do you remember those nights I would drink,
    And let you do anything you desired?
    Do you remember how you hugged me and laughed,
    When I came home and told you I was fired?
    Do you remember the Coke tabs,
    And how happy we used to be?
    Wherever this world may take you,
    Please promise you won't forget me.




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      OH GOSH THIS ONE TRULY MADE LUMPS COME UP IN MY THROAT. I BROUGHT MY OWN MEMORIES WITH MY EX HUSBAND BACK. OH HOW I MISS THOSE "GOOD TIME". WOW! I'VE GOT TO GET THIS OFF MY MIND OR I'LL CRY!
    GREATTTTTTTTT WORK.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      Lots of things for him to remember here ! I felt your strucure was good and once again, the theme of your poem was very good. I hope he does remember and does not forget. A really good write - well done.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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