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Author:	TechnoticQ
ASL Info:	25/M/Royal Oak, MI
Elite Ratio:	3.86 - 359/307/43
Words:	129

Class/Type:	Poetry/Legend
Total Views:	230
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	828

Description:
This piece was taken from the first mental picture image I got when reading my dear friend Sicobe's idea for a poem, though I did not try to follow her parameters strictly; more just used them in muse like fashion. Hope you all enjoy the write- comments are heralded and shamelessly begged for.
-Q

Elysium Fields dots

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I’m going on the final quest
Out to the final resting place
Where sentries lay their head to rest
In golden coffins trimmed with lace.

I speak of the world outside the earth
Where mist walks with as shadows do;
The place where those of true good worth
Are lauded by God’s chosen few.

South of heaven, north of hell,
A little west of purgatory;
A cloudy range made strong and well
By fine Demeter’s glory.

I’ve earned this wispy resting ground
By the battle I endure;
To come out the conquering hero, bound
To karma, soft and pure.

I ride out to where the harvest yields
With my haloed head held high--
Forth on to Elysium fields
Where warriors go to die.

Submitted on 2005-09-01 12:14:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i wrote a poem about elysium and i searched to see if anyone else wrote somethin similiar and i found this. i think this is trully wonderful although i hate legend poems and all, i enjoyed this. the flow was going, the imagery was paradise and very explanatory -take care

you could check out mine if youd like

you seem to have alot of talent in some of the work i've read of yours..
| Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  When a poem takes me on a journey,
I believe that I have stepped into an experience of another.
Then I begin to feel in my own inept way
what is carried across by way of words
what thoughts and feelings may translate from one soul to another.
the ending of this poem was solid and pulls together the whole composition....
Where indeed do warriors go to die? Beautiful expression.
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by arkayye | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved the mythological basis of this. The whole thing was amazing. you are still my literary hero(weird how it always seems like i'm kissing your ass, but you deserve it for this). the last stanza was the best. awesome job.
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
  I ride out to where the harvest yields
With my haloed head held high-
Forth on to Elysium fields
Where warriors go to die.

this last stanza ended it all very well. it's cool how u combined a lil bit of greek mythology and christianity 2 make the basis of this poem. this one was cool. keep it up. only true soldiers reach the elysium fields.
"troy"
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  damn this is a different type of poem i usually don't read one's like this but the name caught me, and i'm glad it did man it's got great flow and it nicely creative, great piece of art. fcking a man, nice job.

withblindedeyez
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
  Luffleh! Easy to read, loverly flow and images...I'm glad I was able to be your muse. You did really well with thisun, Q. I'd print it out and tack it on the wall if my printer still worked...-kicks Stan- he's being a poo. T.T

Next time you need inspiration, I suggest just sitting REALLLYYY really still and staring vacantly off at the cieling. Or at wrinkled sheets. o.O that always works for me.
~Sicobe R. Crow
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was good. I did enjoyed reading this write. Good format and flow. Looking forward to reading more of your writings. Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this. when i read it i got the thoughts of a gallant warrior and adventure, king arthur sorta thing, and then there was something else i just can't explain(that always happens). i loved the way it flowed from the page to the mind and then to the world around me...ahhh...i don't mean to babble i especially liked the last stanza, it wrapped it all up proper. hope to read more.

c-ya,
Misty
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by mistakes | [ Reply to This ]
  Well structured, well rhymed and well writen. I enjoyed reading this - it was easy on the eye and the mind - a really good write and well done.
| Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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