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    dots Submission Name: Within what'z Withindots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 628
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 175

       This reads as posted but also you can read down the first part, middle part and end; i: And the Waves as the light spirit all in mirror...etc.
    Quirky epiphany ; )
    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif ; )

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    dotsWithin what'z Withindots

    And the day was good
    Wavez, Water, Wine

    As the Light was warming
    Spirit, Soul, Sunshine

    All in reflection
    Mirror, Map, Mine

    Submitted on 2005-09-01 13:57:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, very clever..i did read it as you said..and all those ways are little poems of their own...

    wavy..and delicious this is..like Frank said..

    short and sweet!

    | Posted on 2011-06-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Quirky, eh? I call it talented.

    Very nicely done Tiff, what a fallagoonic idea, to let your poem read good no matter where you read...you could put all the words on cards and shuffle 'em, and every time you'd havee a credible piece!

    Bloody bewdy! I thought it was scrum-diddly-umptious!

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Different it is. Didnt quite understand what message you was trying to get across. Sorry I like the other one better. Thank you for sharing with us.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, crisp and to the point and a good read. Out of curiosity, what was flowing more freely - the waves, the water, or the wine ???
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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