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    dots Submission Name: WRITERS BLOCK: VERSE 2dots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       See Xtremegentleman for Verse 1!

    Yes.....me and X are working together! This could be dangerous!


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    dotsWRITERS BLOCK: VERSE 2dots
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    On my block,
    Education, goes further than school learning.
    On my block,
    It feels as though the world has forever stopped turning.
    On my block,
    Everyone you meet, always has a blunt in hand burning.
    On my block,
    There is no money, yet everyone is still yearning.

    This is my writerís block.
    These streets have taught me all that I know.
    How to write poetry,
    How to slam,
    How to free styling flow.
    How to use music,
    To create art,
    Is a place some poets canít go.
    At times I can take off this mask,
    And let the thug in me show.

    On this paper,
    The combinations of two blocks unite.
    Two different people,
    Two different minds,
    With the same mentality write.
    Trying to bring the darkness of what we do to a light.
    Even though some want to argue on the words we recite.

    I hold my pen as a weapon,
    I chose to stay away from the heat.
    My ink against this paper,
    Reflects the drama on the street.
    So if you ever decide,
    To go for a poetic walk.
    Go ahead and take a journey,
    To my writers block.




    Submitted on 2005-09-01 14:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      yo this is cool how u took like the idea of writer's block and turned it into a place. it was still very poetic and at the same time the [censored] was still hood. i was flowing this as i was reading this. u and x killed this [censored]. let the ink bleed on the page
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very good job.. i enjoyed the thought of the whole writers block theme.. its like you are explaining to everybody what you can do and you do that very well.. this is defintetly a fave addition.. good job girl
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, verse 1 was awesome too. I almost went and wrote a writer's block v. 3 but not sure if that would tick you guys off, lol. I like this piece though, I take it you're from the hood too. ;) Awesome job on this, lovin' it. Think I should write v. 3? It could be a nice lil collabo' we can start up.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Lil Nick | [ Reply to This ]
      First off, my sons (4 of them) all think the Sesame St. photo is hilarious. I really like the rhythm of this-I would love to hear YOU do it out loud. You really capture & celebrate how poetry is dynamic & alive. That is definitely lots to celebrate compared to dry clinically executed poetry. I liked the same lines stolie did. Yeah for the way you wield your weapon! Nice
    Cleo
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      nice. I wish I could say more, but some times the more you say, the less you mean. And the less others hear. GREAT work!Oh yeah and by the way, I compliment your ability to be versitile and cooperative. Joint works can be impressive if two minds are in sync.
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by sistersinister | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I rectum that is why you iz one of the elites of the elite...

    *standing ovation*

    What a cool, fun, flowing piece dear Li Li...as always...well written and great! Now...lemme go read X's...I am sure its equally as amazing. Glad that lil bugger didnt get blown away by the storm, HA!

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      oooooo Li Li!

    this turned out amazingly girl! you can tell the thought you put into this, and i can feel a sincerity with this that is ultimate and unwavering and powerful!

    i especially liked:

    "These streets have taught me all that I know.
    How to write poetry,
    How to slam,
    How to free styling flow."

    thats where i saw truely our experiences make us, and mold us and shape us into the beings we are. though we are different in so many ways we can bring our experiences to each other...

    what a thought provoking read girl!

    -nikki
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG...Can you hear me clap???
    Brilliant on the part of both of you...I had to go and read Verse 1 and then jump here, but it was very well compiled and LiLi - you are terrific on your part...now I must go and tell x the same
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it! It has been a pleasure working with you! I like what you added. That's nice and nasty at the same time. Welcome to the Writer's Block...This just might start something here...

    X
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]


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