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    dots Submission Name: A Day for August to Rememberdots
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    Author: Emma_closes
    ASL Info:    15/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 268
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 418



    Description:
       Written one August afternoon a few weeks ago as I watched the sun sink lower in the sky and listened to Hillary and Nicole perform "Sink, Florida, Sink" dreamily .


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    dotsA Day for August to Rememberdots
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    Guitar chords line the walls,
    muttered vocals swaying
    with a million cliché adjectives.
    I consider crying,
    out of joy
    or for so many things lost,
    like soft words sung in F sharp.

    A few remaining memories
    lay focused on days like this.
    I'm thinking about crying out
    for the things that are returning
    and those that are forgotten.




    Submitted on 2005-09-01 15:07:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good. It reminded me alot of something Ani DiFranco would sing. Profound and artistic...like something read aloud in a smokey jazz club. A simple memory of a simple day. I really enjoyed this

    Be Well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      Sentimentale, an intense overview of pathos while incorporating musical notes. The poem being divided by two stanzas is quite unnecessary but the content is good. I think it would have pulled well without the break. The ethos is quite conspicuous a tragedy, depression and a feel to be free. Interesting write here, quite the many a talented teen should posses
    Write as you do, with sincere excellence
    Your
    Alexis
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by YoungWerther | [ Reply to This ]



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