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    dots Submission Name: The Heart of a Childdots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Pretty much just thinking out loud. I guess this could have been more of a prose than poetry. Oh well, tell me what you think.

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    dotsThe Heart of a Childdots

    A heart so pure
    so sincere
    so small,
    yet so big.
    A heart so young
    so strong
    so trusting,
    yet still able to be broken.
    A mind so curious
    so eager
    so sweet,
    yet so brilliant.
    A child so loving
    so innocent
    so accepting,
    yet so sad.
    A child so confused
    so hopeful
    so forgiving,
    yet still so alone.
    A father so selfish
    so unreliable
    so incapable,
    yet still so needed.
    A mother so protective
    so warm
    so caring,
    yet still so determined.
    A mother and a child
    so close,
    so united,
    yet a father is so distant.

    Submitted on 2005-09-01 16:15:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So very sad reading about children in pain but yet a part of life many choose to ignore and pretend that its not there. Very good and very sad.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by tokillthedead | [ Reply to This ]
      Brought back memories of the poem 'Little Boy' that I wrote. I connected with this straight away and I thought it was very very good.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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