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    dots Submission Name: Garbagedots
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    Author: Poetic Cure
    ASL Info:    49.f.mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 313/137/33
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 250
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 955



    Description:
       I thought of how Mother Nature must be feeling about all the garbage thrown out the windows of our cars and boats and polluting the waters.


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    “Don’t you care?” she asks,
    as a tear appears.
    My waters are loosing its clearness.
    Garbage carelessly thrown,
    poisoning and creating a cyst pool.
    My heart breaks,
    hearing my creatures sobbing.
    Crying out for help,
    as it lays dying,
    caught in a clump of garbage.

    “Don’t you care?” she sobs.
    My beautiful land,
    strewn with garbage.
    Roadsides crying in the wind,
    grass choking, covered in trash.
    Small animals crying,
    no safe place to lie upon.
    Poisoned food supply,
    killing their young.


    “Don’t you care?” she screams.
    You are slowly killing me.
    Causing me much pain.
    My eyes burning,
    light is dimming.

    “Will you care if I die?” she moans.
    Slowly taking her last breath.
    Mother Nature lying dead upon
    her bed of garbage clumps.




    Submitted on 2005-09-01 18:18:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great topic to use in poetic form and to remind us that Mother Nature is precious. I pick trash up when I can - down at the river a lot of tourists and even locals strewn beer bottles, cans, wrappers, clothes, etc. along the shores. If you can bring it in why can't ya bring it out???
    As the others commented, the ending is very original and well done.
    Thanks for the read!
    Happy Friday!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I also like reading and writing about the outdoors / nature. This was well written and you made a very relevant point here. I really enjoyed reading this.
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      like i always say,of intrest to me,is something written about,other,than one persons stuff.and this topic was an excellent.i always try myself to write about other things than what just happens to me(variety is the spice of life)and i write about all of it.
    anyways nicely done.and you ended it with a bang
    metaporically speaking was well done.talent you posses
    i usually try to find a little criticizm
    but cannot


    cool

    wes all toyysruss

    (read the pill age,take 1 and take 2)
    you might be interested
    just a sample
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      Very moving. It has a great point to it and it makes you think which is what poetry is suppoes to do. Very good idea with the semi-plot type thing to it.
    | Posted on 2005-09-01 00:00:00 | by tokillthedead | [ Reply to This ]



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