Description: x-ianhoyskolt gave me the inspiration for this piece...
"thankyou"
Anyway... back to the piece... its new... just written and... i suppose i could call it a 'draft'..
This piece doesn't really bear any emotional significance to me whatsoever...
ENJOY
<kai>
By Word Of Mouth -------------------------------------------
Fairies i see's fairies
They's attacking me
They's want my blood
To make's their soup
They's allways come
But never leave
I will's be toast quite soon
They take'd my wallet
*burp*
They'd takin my wallit
Yes they ave
They's robbed me blind
They's think im dumb
They twirl in the night sky
It's all that i see's
These stupid fairies
Patronising me.
Oh why oh why
They's torment me so
Why can't you's fairies
Just leave me alone
They take's cheap shots
Here's and there's
They's spilled my drink
Messed up my hair
They left's me dishevelled
And try's as i might
Can't make these fairies
Spare's me tonight
The fairies are coming
They's all that i see
These stupid fairies
They's haunt my dreams
They make's me shiver
They make's me sweat
Iv'e soiled my pants
And wet my bed
These fairies must's be demons
In desguise
The way they's tease
As they's fly by
And all the time
That they's persist
I've got's no proof
They even exist...
This was brilliant, I loved it. I am so ..honoured .. flattered . .some [censored] like that .. that my writing could inspire you. Awesome. Ntozake Shange (her name means “she who comes into her own things” (Ntozake) and “she who walks like a lion” (Shange) from a Zulu dialiect). would have been so proud Shange believes not only must she repossess language, but “deslaveryize” it. .. It might be to some genetic reason that she likes to use images from slavery and suppression .. but I think she has a good point when it comes to liberating language from its literal, academic or 'book' form and use it more as a tool in itself ...where the language tells you something about the speaker and is more like a spoken .. or thought . .. language.
Another reason that I really loved this is the association with fairies ... damn random and fluttering fairies. . .At least Igot the feeling you are talking about the same fairies that I am. Once was dancing in my lounge, the other just sitting crosslegged on the floor smoking and chatting. They threw some sparkly [censored] in the air and had us dazzled for a while. And just as we were getting a bit more dynamic and disshelved and open, in a moment of distraction they had gone. Later , when I was spent and had gone to bed, sleeping, they fluttered by again and left me a note. . 'thanks for the dance' .. damn fluttering fairies ..
..I'm glad to see another that's confused about their existence ..
umh .. the piece could maybe do with punctuation, but as you said it is a draft.. I was thinking that , the two burps where they are seem pretty spaced out and random.. which i guess is ok for a burp since .. well .. they come pretty randomly don't they .. so I just contradicted what I was going to say .. anyways.. I was just thinking that it might work if you added a sound word to each stanza ..like
Fairies i see's fairies *slurp* They's attacking me They's want my blood To make's their soup They's allways come But never leave I will's be toast quite soon
They take'd my wallet *burp* They'd takin my wallit Yes they ave They's robbed me blind They's think im dumb They twirl in the night sky It's all that i see's These stupid fairies Patronising me.
Oh why oh why *glugg-glugg* They's torment me so Why can't you's fairies Just leave me alone They take's cheap shots Here's and there's They's spilled my drink Messed up my hair They left's me dishevelled And try's as i might Can't make these fairies Spare's me tonight
The fairies are coming They's all that i see These stupid fairies They's haunt my dreams They make's me shiver They make's me sweat Iv'e soiled my pants And wet my bed These fairies must's be demons In desguise The way they's tease As they's fly by And all the time That they's persist I've got's no proof They even exist...
*burp* ..
or whichever words you think would fit better ... just a suggestion .. when i think about it it is still sweet the way it is .. .. heh ..
Submission Name: By Word Of Mouth
