Down which road does destiny..
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"Down Which Road Does Destiny Lie?"
Title wouldn't fit :)
Title wouldn't fit :)
Down which road does destiny..
There’s a road stretching out In front of my involuntarily moving Feet; I can see it winding All the way to the horizon To that red, blue, black sunset Where the heat from the sun Striking the tar top Makes it writhe Underneath my gaze My mind wanders; My step falters; And I look around in hopes to gauge How far I’ve traveled in one day But in all directions this road goes Spiraling into an unknown Leading me towards What is commonly believed to be Destiny. My shoes feel heavy on my feet Socks sticking between my toes And my gait hesitates As I come to yet another crossroads Evaluation skills come in handy As I try to decide which way do I go But every road is serpentine Twisting and ready to strike Should I choose wrong I'm heading for destiny but down which road does it lie? |
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| Destiny is a funny thing. As you travel down life's road, sometimes you feel you have control. When you reach a crossroads, you can sometimes see just how it will play out. Then you choose a road, and it goes differently than you anticipated. Great work, keep it up. Blue | Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by aclu4blu | [ Reply to This ] | Very nicely written...i think we all come to these crossroads many times throughout our lives and you have expressed the feelings and the way that it can work in our favour or against very well...destiny is in our own hands much of time and you are very insightful to be able to see and express that so well too...well done :) | | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ] | your so totaly my favorite writer. i jsut love how your not to complex to where i have to read a line like 6 times and still be saying wtf. ^v^ | - natalie michelle | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ] | Destiny never looked like such a drag before I read this poem, but I sill love it. You did a great job describing the feeling of looking for a proper destiny, but there's still an essence of not wanting it. And for that I congradulate you. I'd give this poem a 9.2 out of 10. Keep the poems comming. | | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ] | down both, of course! this was a nice look at decision making/choices. it was a little adventure into the mind. it flowed very well and some of the images were awesome. my only suggestion would be to tighten it up here and there. otherwise, it's a fine piece of work. | | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ] | Awesome work! A fave! You've really done something original with a subject written to death. My one and only tiny nit was with 'And my gait hesitates'; thought that sounded a bit awkward. I would jsut say 'And I hesitate.' But other than that, excellent work! | Peace, Joe | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ] | |
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