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Down which road does destiny..

Author: Childoutspoken
ASL Info:    21/F
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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"Down Which Road Does Destiny Lie?"
Title wouldn't fit :)

Down which road does destiny..

There’s a road stretching out
In front of my involuntarily moving
Feet; I can see it winding
All the way to the horizon
To that red, blue, black sunset
Where the heat from the sun
Striking the tar top
Makes it writhe
Underneath my gaze
My mind wanders;
My step falters;
And I look around in hopes to gauge
How far I’ve traveled in one day
But in all directions this road goes
Spiraling into an unknown
Leading me towards
What is commonly believed to be

My shoes feel heavy on my feet
Socks sticking between my toes
And my gait hesitates
As I come to yet another crossroads
Evaluation skills come in handy
As I try to decide which way do I go
But every road is serpentine
Twisting and ready to strike
Should I choose wrong
I'm heading for destiny
but down which road does it lie?

Submitted on 2005-09-02 09:51:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Destiny is a funny thing. As you travel down life's road, sometimes you feel you have control. When you reach a crossroads, you can sometimes see just how it will play out. Then you choose a road, and it goes differently than you anticipated. Great work, keep it up.

| Posted on 2005-10-12 00:00:00 | by aclu4blu | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nicely written...i think we all come to these crossroads many times throughout our lives and you have expressed the feelings and the way that it can work in our favour or against very well...destiny is in our own hands much of time and you are very insightful to be able to see and express that so well too...well done :)
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
  your so totaly my favorite writer. i jsut love how your not to complex to where i have to read a line like 6 times and still be saying wtf. ^v^

- natalie michelle
| Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by The Blue Panda | [ Reply to This ]
  Destiny never looked like such a drag before I read this poem, but I sill love it. You did a great job describing the feeling of looking for a proper destiny, but there's still an essence of not wanting it. And for that I congradulate you. I'd give this poem a 9.2 out of 10. Keep the poems comming.
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
  down both, of course! this was a nice look at decision making/choices. it was a little adventure into the mind. it flowed very well and some of the images were awesome. my only suggestion would be to tighten it up here and there. otherwise, it's a fine piece of work.
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
  Awesome work! A fave! You've really done something original with a subject written to death. My one and only tiny nit was with 'And my gait hesitates'; thought that sounded a bit awkward. I would jsut say 'And I hesitate.' But other than that, excellent work!


| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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