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    dots Submission Name: Being Real (please check)dots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 1145
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    Description:
       Its a poem about someone who is still in love but decides he/she needs to move on


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    dotsBeing Real (please check)dots
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    I right now am being real
    from this pain i cannot heal
    and even though ive tried to forget
    just hearing ur name makes tears come to my eyes again
    i look around i try to run away
    i dont know why i havent yet
    there is nothing holding me down
    except the thought of seeing ur smile
    and just beacuse that thought alone
    but being real as i said
    i am planning to move away
    to a place where i can forget
    what one day ur words really meant
    let go of you is what i must
    beacuse this wasnt just some lust
    it was me really being in love
    but i guess it doesnt matter anymore
    for this will be my last words
    i shall see you... nevermore







    Submitted on 2005-09-02 14:32:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good...and it came from the heart and you used what you felt and it all came across really nicely...nice job yo...

    there is nothing holding me down
    except the thought of seeing ur smile

    I thought that this line was really sweet and it really made the poem soo much better for me. So yea good job.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem but it made me feel weird when i read it lol i think thats because i know this is what i need to do and its describing how i fel so i can relate to this alot really great write and u should keep it up i think you'll go far
    take care and whoever this is aimed at i hope things turn out ok
    izzi x
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yet another nice poem from a different perception. Good job. I think it describes how it feels to reluctantly move on very well. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes it's almost the concept of the person. Our minds love to do that to us, to give themselves up to other people and never ever want to let go. It happens. Good write. Keep it real.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]
      well it was a good poem. whoever it was for i hope u get her back. i liked the structure and the way u used ur words. very nice
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this write. Is sad to. I want to cry. Brings back memories. Good write.
    Keep up the good work. God bless Have a safe holiday weekend
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      It was a good poem...I can realte...although I have never been in love with someone but just the feeling of them near and having them hurts to loose it...Great job...
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by deathbelow | [ Reply to This ]


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