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Oh dear


Author: aletha_409
ASL Info:    19/F/Kansas
Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 34 /41 /11
Words: 44
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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Description:


This is just peculiar.


Oh dear



The uncomfortable sensation
That causes women to gasp
And grown men to weep.
That feeling that you are
Not alone, and something
Is getting closer
Closer
Closer
And now it's here.


I told you not to wear the Pokemon underwear.




Submitted on 2005-09-02 15:12:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ahhh, the uncomfortable and humiliating wedgie. I remember those in primary (elementary) school. Ouch, they hurt like hell.

I remember this one fella got a wedgie that ripped his undies clean out while his pants still stayed on... he honestly got lifted a few feet in the air by some bully... that image has stuck with me for some reason lol. It was really mean but omfg, oh so funny lol. I'm just glad it wasn't me receiving it hahah.

You didn't really want a proper critique, did you? I just wanted to say that this one was a bit of a laugh too... the last line was unexpected... in fact I was wondering what you were talking about until you delivered that bombshell onto me... exactly like a stalking wedgiefier would do! Hahahah - wedgiefier... someone add that to the dictionary lol.

Anyways, peace
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
  Hahahahaha...oh boy! the good old wedgie! Don't u hate them?? Underwear that go bravely where no man has been before...lmao...
You really got me there in the end! ( but not like a wedgie!) hahaha cher
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
  haha.. there you go making me laugh again. You seem to have a knack for throwing in those lines that catch you a bit by surprise , I sort of found myself ending up with this idea served .. which made me look at the steps i'd just taken ( the rest of the poem leading up to it) very amused.

..maybe change some of the line starts to lower caps.. just nit picking ..but it makes it look and read (for me) just a smidgeon better ..

anyways .. thanks
I'll check ou your stories some later time ..when i got some more time

xx
Christian
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by x-ianhoyskolt | [ Reply to This ]
  Jaja I would've liked for it to be longer tho :P
I liek dthe way u made it flow I hope that didnt really happent o you =P

Write on
| Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]


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