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    dots Submission Name: Where I'm Fromdots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    Description:
       This was another class assignment where we were supposed to use George Ella Lyon's poem 'Where I'm From" as a model...This is what I came up with....I haven't turned it in yet...tell me honestly what you think!


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    dotsWhere I'm Fromdots
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    I am from lampshades,
    From Duct Tape and Store-it-all boxes.
    I am from the ever-changing home.
    (Old, new,
    but all the same.)
    I am from the daisy's,
    The weeping willows
    whose limbs embraced
    a small child.
    I'm from sprinkler days and trying eyes,
    from Sylvia and Dean.
    I'm from the laugh-to-easy's and,
    cry-too-hard's.

    From "your too young to know" 's and,
    "You'll never understand" 's.
    I'm from pray every night,
    although I never did.
    I'm from a big city and a village across the seas,
    peanut butter and animal crackers
    From the Newspaper work of my Grandfather,
    who I never knew.
    the only tear my Grandmother cried.
    Up high on a shelf,
    dusty and wanted to be forgotten
    memories fade away just like the time;
    I am from these moments-
    torn away at the stem-
    Leaf- trampled beneath the family tree.






    Submitted on 2005-09-02 18:33:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      AMAZING , i loved it adding it to favs right now but seriously what awsome flow it was long and i am awfull and dont always get througth the longs stuff but this just went so easliy i am soo impressed truly amazing work
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. The changing world we live in.
    My favorite part is the last part.

    "Up high on a shelf,
    dusty and wanted to be forgotten
    memories fade away just like the time;
    I am from these moments-
    torn away at the stem-
    Leaf- trampled beneath the family tree."
    Keep up the good work.



    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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