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    dots Submission Name: IN YOUR WAKEdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 838
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    Bytes: 397



    Description:
       this referrs to those lovers you love to hate


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    dotsIN YOUR WAKEdots
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    You stand before me
    Your magic revealed
    I want to refuse you but cant
    Not with the candles
    Not the way they make your image so intense.
    I want to not want
    Still I need you hardness
    Need to feel you from inside
    I scream your name
    Out of hate
    Out of heat
    Every time it is beautiful
    every time it is ugly




    Submitted on 2005-09-02 18:59:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its a goo way of showing something intimate wiht out making me gag. that takes some work to do with out being descriptive, or really laying it on heavy you like layed it on lightly, good job.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]
      This is some seriously intimate stuff. But it seems that when a person writes to another, and it is intimate, it is good. It just is. I like the short lines, I like the confusion, I like the ironic knowledge of it all. Cool.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I can relate to this one . I have been in that frame of mind to many times. I had a boyfriend that wanted me only for one thing, but I let him come back again and again. Stupid me couldn't say no. Cause I felt deep down inside he really did love me.
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem describes a feeling of confusion inside the writter. I liked the basic set up of the poem even though sometimes i got lost. It made me feel like i wasnt alone in confusion. Reminds me of me and my ex when we broke up and she still called.
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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