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    dots Submission Name: Falldots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1199
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 601



    Description:
       Describing fall for me


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    I look around me and everything is dying
    I look around me nothing i can do about it
    I stare at the leaves falling down
    I look at the trees making vows
    and i know its that time again
    the time where everything just goes dead
    when nature stops its year long growth
    and it starts to take a downward plunge
    no birds around no squirels to see
    they are all downsouth or hybernating
    it seems forever this here peace
    must be nature working on a master piece
    and i wonder whats with this
    and then i realize fall here is




    Submitted on 2005-09-02 19:21:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a pretty poem. I don't think it matters that it doesn't have a whole lot of flow, it seems fine to me. It's a good descriprion of the fall. The only thing I didn't like about it is that it seems so pessimistic! I love the fall season! Great write, though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      ill agree with irisg girl here a lil to much I other than that i thought it was good the flow was nice and the feeling came across well too
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a pretty good peice i would say. It doesn't seem to have much flow to it, however i like how it describes fall so deeply and in detail
    | Posted on 2005-09-02 00:00:00 | by mastermike | [ Reply to This ]


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