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    dots Submission Name: shadow, my only frienddots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Alone
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    Description:
       the shadow theme is SO overdone but i couldnt help myself.


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    dotsshadow, my only frienddots
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    Shadow, Shadow, Silent friend
    Come with me, Please take my hand
    You're the only one who ever cares
    The only one who has ever given a damn
    The only one whose always behind me

    You're my only friend
    You can't talk to me
    But you sure can listen

    You're the only one who could ever make me change my mind
    The only one who could ever make me cry'
    But you won't because
    You don't want to

    You're the only one who could ever understand
    Because you're not stupid
    Like all the other people
    Who just don't get it
    Don't even try to see beneath my skin

    Shadow, Shadow
    Take my hand
    You're the only one
    I could ever love
    And you're nothing more
    Than some imaginary friend
    Just pretend

    My only friend




    Submitted on 2005-09-02 19:50:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, it makes me think that your contomplating with yourself wether your friend is real or not, its sharp. Duece N Much Love
    -Hood
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      it's a good poem...sometimes your only friend is your shadow or the people in your head because they always listen. but the problem (which was addressed) is that they can't talk back. and sometimes they scorn. so i'd rather take my refuge in someone real because sometime one is most mean and critical to one's self. this poem made me feel more alone than in the begining...but the ending sumed it up.
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]


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