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    dots Submission Name: Blood cursing drinkdots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 663
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    dotsBlood cursing drinkdots
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    I feel the blood
    beating in your veins
    the goddess calling your name.
    speaking the game,
    truth,
    of the love divine
    you hold your life
    as you would another
    no regrets no truth in your feelings
    just a shell
    of discontent
    spend your hours wisely or they will be the
    threat
    hold to sorrows weakly
    or you shall find your death
    mist over the sea of all that is green
    and you shall feel the hell
    growing in you,
    the words the pressure
    the love and the lust
    the pain of your future
    the time that rust.
    Cry through the blood
    the ash filled tree
    hallow as her soul you are the girl they see
    hold to the mighty, the rain
    and the bow
    hold onto the mountain
    the time and the row
    grow and die
    and be forgot, the
    corpse is yet to be caught
    off guard or bloody
    you are the soul
    to suck the life out of god.




    Submitted on 2005-09-02 22:40:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow. That's kinda creepy. deep... but creepy. It was pretty good. I could see it as being more of a song than a poem though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont go for the goth such most of the time and will admit to looking past it most nights i couldnt with this on ein fact its the only one i have ever commented on it was gotich yes but not so dark it seemed obbsesed it just had nice flow i liked it good work
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good. it was kinda wierd though, but i liked it none the less. it seemed like u used a lot of different themes and it all fit into ur poem. good write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome little Gothic song you got there. I could hear the piano and cellos wooing me on through the slow read. I lykey!!!

    Peace, love and awesome moist cake -

    ~MJ~
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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