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    dots Submission Name: Understand?dots
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    Author: Robbing Hood
    ASL Info:    16/m/Ark
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/35/10
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 731
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 762



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       I hope you like this. I consider myself more of an M.C. as well as a poet, but i think I showed more of a Poet side with this one. I hope you like it though.


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    dotsUnderstand?dots
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    Listen to the thoughts that go through my head/
    Tellin me I aint worth shit and should be dead/
    do you understand the words that I am saying?/
    I couldn't help but think about this very poem as I was laying/
    In bed wondering if there is anything better out there for me?/
    If there is would somebody show me I would sure like to see/
    it i dont understand/
    how i can be treated as a kid but when something needs to be done i'm a man/
    But I'm gonna be ageless for life and i dont care what the hell you say/
    I'm not fragile but hard like clay/
    But right now I feel like glass under pressure/
    but i wont break cause the stress i've been through you can not measure/




    Submitted on 2005-09-03 01:18:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Stress...ugh...I got too much of that. Anything that a person can go through...I have gone through it.

    This was a very serious powerful write. And I see that someone was hating on the curse words...HEy...if you want to express it...express it how YOU WANT IT! Fck them. You write how you feel fit...it gets emotions across. Some can be offended...but no one TOLD them to read. Right?

    Keep on keepin on!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol some people don't appreicate the better sides of [censored] cussing lol. anyways i liked this, it was the [censored] lol. Yo and i didn't even notice the cussing until a few minutes ago fo real fo real. lol. But keep up the good work..

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      u shud try to use less cursing words but apart from that really great write can't wait to c more :)
    izzi x
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the [censored] ninja! it's not like the [censored] you usually write...Keep [censored] aberrant...stay in school...do drugs...I don't know what else to say
    Duece ninja
    J
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very good. but may i make one suggestion? you should try to express your feelings without useing curse-words because it makes it sound like mabe you couldnt think of any other word to write. but this is a very good poem and i enjoyed reading it. i to am a fan of your writeing.
    keep in touch.
    -jo
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by catie jo | [ Reply to This ]


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