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My relationship


Author: Drea
ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289 /142 /53
Words: 212
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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My relationship



You called me a Bitch
You called me a whore
You played with my emotions
You made my heart sore

I cursed at you
I lied and cheated
I kicked you in the nuts
And left you defeated

You dissed me to your friends
Told me to rot in hell
You even hit me
And made my arm swell

I purposely picked fight with you
I would pester and nag
And even in the halls
I sometimes called you a fag

You loved and cared for me
Even when I did you wrong
I remember Freshman year
You even wrote me a song

Even though I bad-mouth you
No one else can say shit
And even though I cheated on you
Your the only one I fucked with

You hold my hand you bring me flowers
whenever I'm sick
You hold me close
and tell me you love every chance you get

I tell you I love you and let you know
That you mean the world to me
and when we have our sleepovers
I watch you when you sleep

We've been together
For years now, going on two
Happy Anniversary
P.S. I love you.




Submitted on 2005-09-03 09:22:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really like that becuase its not only the stupid fuking mushy bull[censored], youre showing the hard times not the ones sugar coated. i really like this i cant relate to all of it but i just im just gonna say nice work!
xox crazyb
| Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
  this write made me laugh! but im glad u guyz still found love throughout all that! and like everyone eelse said : I cursed at you
I lied and cheated
I kicked you in the nuts
And left you defeated
that made me laugh to
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Gee, you guys were just made for each other, huh? I think this is pretty cool, it seems like you hate each other, and then it's like, bam, I love you. I wasn't really expecting it. Good job
| Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
  really good poem youvegot potential and it shows on thesecond line wats the last word i thought u ment hoe but its a reall god write
| Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by crazijessi | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this and im glad that you two are back together again although from the writting i didnt think that was going to happen so the end realy suprised me.

I cursed at you
I lied and cheated
I kicked you in the nuts
And left you defeated

i also agree with unknown soldier that part made me laugh to.

~Gena~
| Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm...this is pretty good, a passion poem no doubt, good, but a bit visceral...still good though. Glad you guys have resolved your differences (although I'm not quite sure you have...it doesn't sound like it much) Good write.

Storm
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm glad u 2 resolved ur problems and u stuck it through. it's cool that he was so devoted 2 u. good write.

I cursed at you
I lied and cheated
I kicked you in the nuts
And left you defeated

i just thought these lines were funny. i'm sorry.
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  i like it even though the writing is very very... coarse sounding for lack of better words. but some poems can pull that off anf this is one that deffinately can.
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  Love always prevail over tough times if and only if patience comes into play, a vital lesson is dt one of d two in a relationship must play d fool 2 make it a success, but who wants 2 play d fool?
its a nice work, no criticism tho i'll read it over
| Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]


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