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    dots Submission Name: My relationshipdots
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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMy relationshipdots
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    You called me a Bitch
    You called me a whore
    You played with my emotions
    You made my heart sore

    I cursed at you
    I lied and cheated
    I kicked you in the nuts
    And left you defeated

    You dissed me to your friends
    Told me to rot in hell
    You even hit me
    And made my arm swell

    I purposely picked fight with you
    I would pester and nag
    And even in the halls
    I sometimes called you a fag

    You loved and cared for me
    Even when I did you wrong
    I remember Freshman year
    You even wrote me a song

    Even though I bad-mouth you
    No one else can say shit
    And even though I cheated on you
    Your the only one I fucked with

    You hold my hand you bring me flowers
    whenever I'm sick
    You hold me close
    and tell me you love every chance you get

    I tell you I love you and let you know
    That you mean the world to me
    and when we have our sleepovers
    I watch you when you sleep

    We've been together
    For years now, going on two
    Happy Anniversary
    P.S. I love you.




    Submitted on 2005-09-03 09:22:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like that becuase its not only the stupid fuking mushy bull[censored], youre showing the hard times not the ones sugar coated. i really like this i cant relate to all of it but i just im just gonna say nice work!
    xox crazyb
    | Posted on 2005-11-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      this write made me laugh! but im glad u guyz still found love throughout all that! and like everyone eelse said : I cursed at you
    I lied and cheated
    I kicked you in the nuts
    And left you defeated
    that made me laugh to
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Gee, you guys were just made for each other, huh? I think this is pretty cool, it seems like you hate each other, and then it's like, bam, I love you. I wasn't really expecting it. Good job
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      really good poem youvegot potential and it shows on thesecond line wats the last word i thought u ment hoe but its a reall god write
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by crazijessi | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this and im glad that you two are back together again although from the writting i didnt think that was going to happen so the end realy suprised me.

    I cursed at you
    I lied and cheated
    I kicked you in the nuts
    And left you defeated

    i also agree with unknown soldier that part made me laugh to.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...this is pretty good, a passion poem no doubt, good, but a bit visceral...still good though. Glad you guys have resolved your differences (although I'm not quite sure you have...it doesn't sound like it much) Good write.

    Storm
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by OrionsStorm | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm glad u 2 resolved ur problems and u stuck it through. it's cool that he was so devoted 2 u. good write.

    I cursed at you
    I lied and cheated
    I kicked you in the nuts
    And left you defeated

    i just thought these lines were funny. i'm sorry.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it even though the writing is very very... coarse sounding for lack of better words. but some poems can pull that off anf this is one that deffinately can.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      Love always prevail over tough times if and only if patience comes into play, a vital lesson is dt one of d two in a relationship must play d fool 2 make it a success, but who wants 2 play d fool?
    its a nice work, no criticism tho i'll read it over
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by realpassion | [ Reply to This ]


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