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    dots Submission Name: Unforgivendots
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    Author: Mia
    ASL Info:    17/F/MD
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 103/123/52
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsUnforgivendots
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    The pain I'm in, the pain I've caused
    So overwhelming, all of these flaws
    I can't see the future, I can't forget the past
    I can feel happy, but I can't make it last
    And I can't forgive myself

    All that I've done, I know it's over and done
    But it effects me still, from it I just want to run
    Run into nothingness, run from the guilt
    Run from this stress that I've built
    But I can never forgive myself

    I want to live long, I have things to accomplish
    Will I accomplish it all? I hope...I wish
    But the past is always there
    Stalking me, haunting me, always in the air
    And for it I can't forgive myself


    It's not something one can forget
    It's something that can get anyone upset
    I know i must move on, It's what must be done
    But I still have a fantasy to run
    Because through and through all of this
    The drama, the guilt, the remiss
    I can never forgive myself




    Submitted on 2005-09-03 11:27:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this one. The flow of the poem was pretty good, but the flow of the first stanza was really awesome. I do notice something about you personally though, you're 14, you have a long time to forgive yourself for whatever you've done. you'll work through it eventually. keep writing, get the feelings out.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]
      Well it was ok. I have felt this way many times in my life. Thank you for sharing with us. Keep up writing. You have a unique talent.
    God bless
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite often forgiving one's self is much harder than forgiving another.The most important thing in life is to learn from our mistakes and not make them again.If you have done this then you are better off for the experience even if you don't yet realize it. If you're having trouble forgiving yourself the best thing to do is ask them for forgiveness and try your best to make amends.Sometimes people won't allow us to do that in which case simply appologize and let them have their space. Most often they will watch your future actions and judge your sincerity by what they see.Show that you're of good character and they will eventually forgive you, but as for yourself; do what you can to reconcile and go on with your life.It's all you can do.This was a pretty good read and believe me I fully understand.Keep writing your feelings; it helps.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by DarkenedSoul | [ Reply to This ]
      this one was good. u realize that u've done something wrong and u say u can't forgive urself. the repitition was good too. i liked the way u realized that u should stop torturing urself and move on with ur life. good write.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem. i've definetly felt this way sometimes. i really like the lines "I can't see the future, I can't forget the past. I can feel happy, but I can't make it last." accept that the past has happened, and try and move on. good job writing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by emochick13 | [ Reply to This ]


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