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    dots Submission Name: Dominideadots
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    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       not an actual greek figure in mythology, i mixed a suffix to a woman's name (-dea) to the latin word for God, (Domini). there is no rape in this poem, it's not about that.


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    dotsDominideadots
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    O Athens, I sing of the unfortunate maid,
    whom Midas of hell sent a demon as her bridegroom,
    as she prayed.

    Her thoughts filled with the daily work of saints,
    amen and her mind closed to the verge of her impending doom,
    as it taints.

    Believing her invulnerable to evil’s power,
    she slept with a heavy head through night’s long stretch,
    when some cower.

    As morning light begins to peek into her new prison,
    its formless arms bind her as a wretch,
    it is risen.

    Helios’s early gift is stolen and even fire is black,
    just as quickly as she prayed to the god, she is played
    it is back.

    “I am dead, Charon shall bear me, the boiling pitch shall have me”
    she longed to scream and found the words delayed,
    she’s not free

    The passage of time, praying for the fates to cut the string,
    she was released and violently so,
    by the thing

    She woke to the later morn and to a newer fright,
    “it can come back for me any hour though,
    day or night”

    The devil that attended that mournful morn,
    contented at just her fear, waiting
    for her scorn

    she crouched as some do, year after year
    watching for the demon’s return, hating
    most her fear




    Submitted on 2005-09-03 11:54:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish I had the proper brain energy to understand this one better! Sometimes I just don't get Greek myth. But I liked the pattern and the dark mood appealed to me.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
      hm..interesting poems. I love the Greek Mythology in it! I would suggest though, stating who Helios, and Midas, and The Fates are...for those who don't know. I'm sure someone might ask you who they are. As for the poem itself, I like it. Good job
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]


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