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    dots Submission Name: BLINDdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 681
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       The biggest thing to happen in my small town was a double homicide in a promenant comunity two young men died over a drug deal gone bad three men lost thier lives though the shooter is gone too serving most h is life in prison


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    This town is to small to be this big.
    It was two streets once when I was a child.
    The dirt roads got paved though and the street lights went up .
    And I got lost n the money ,I forgot to ask where it came from .
    I walked past the strange cars in the driveway ,ignored the long business trips.
    We went to the shooting range it was fun , the safes got fuller.
    You took the keys to my trunk .
    Somewhere along the way you lost me even I cant quite be sure when .
    You where so gentle as I packed my things so perfectly fine.
    I was so afraid , where did I pay the phone bill? What is an automatic draft ?
    You called every night , sent money , flowers, gifts .
    I got a little job which killed you but you let it be .
    I turned onto my quite street and the reporters bombarded me .
    I Held my hands over my face, as there question pelted me.
    Are you surprised?
    I didn’t know, I couldn’t answer .
    I was born here 22 years ago .
    And I helped ruin it ,
    That night I packed up all the shoes , the rings ,the cloths ,and burnt them every last one
    I moved and dyed my hair , I still get asked once in a while ,aren’t you ……I answer yes
    I married a murderer .




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      OH WOW! IS THIS A TRUE STORY?
    THIS IS A VERY INTERESTING ONE THAT'S FOR SURE. AND THE SURPRISE ENDING...SHOCKED ME TOO. REALLY INTRIGUING ...VERY INTRIGUING.
    | Posted on 2005-09-03 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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