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    dots Submission Name: Natural Disaster (please comment)dots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 740
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1738



    Description:
       Hey guys! I wrote this about my one guy friend and I asked him out and he said no. But I'm just absolutely CRAZY about him. My friends say give up, but I just turn up the music. Everytime i do something that requires a wish...I wish about him.


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    dotsNatural Disaster (please comment)dots
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    Chorus:
    Everybody look out,
    another heart coming down.
    Timber!
    Earthquake of the soul.

    Verse 1:
    If a tree falls and nobody's around to hear it, does it make a sound?
    I have a question did you hear anything when you threw my heart on the ground?
    I love you so much, and yet when you said no, I said "stupid it was just a bet". So I just basically ruined any chance I had...and I know that!

    Chorus:
    Everybody look out,
    another heart coming down.
    Timber!
    Earthquake of the soul.

    Verse 2:
    You couldn't just check yes, why not?
    I think I know why.
    You were ashamed of me,
    afraid of me,
    but now you make me want to curl up and die.
    I could've been, should've been, would've been your girl forever, treating you right.

    Chorus:
    Everybody look out,
    another heart coming down.
    Timber!
    Earthquake of the soul.

    Verse 3:
    And you know that I'm the only girl who like you.
    And you know that I'm that in the only one who cares. Push me on the ground and floor it, beat me down. I don't want to be just friends, i'd rather be dead. Because knowing that I couldn't have you would kill me inside.

    Chorus:
    everybody look out,
    another heart coming down.
    Timber!
    earthquake of the soul.

    Outro:
    You shake me loose, you wrap me tight. I wish you would make up your mind. Because I can't spend my whole life in the rubble, all caught up in the trouble of...you.







    Submitted on 2005-09-03 20:29:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i really liked this song.we have all felt like this in one point of our lives before, havent we?
    or,one day we will.& i have already so i completely know where youre coming from.nice choice for the title.it related to the song alot if you really think about it.
    here's my advise:kill him.if you cant have him,NO ONE ELSE WILL!
    lol...jk.
    keep up the good work!
    _dancing_alone_
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]
      You surprised me and caught me kinda off guard on this one with the title. I was expexting something 'bout the hurricanes or someth'n.Anyway enjoyed reading your lyrics
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-10-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      this one was okay. i think the rhyming coulda been better but u probly weren't worried bout it. i like the feeling behind this one and i hope that he'll realize what he's missing out on and say yes.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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