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    Author: stateXofXmind
    ASL Info:    18/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.09 - 29/49/21
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 281
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 591



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       this one is kinda strange, im trying to get to the reader to show that everything is normal is some way, and from something dark and eery can come something beautiful and alive, just as u think its normal and well.


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    In the deep deseption of of every day life, lies are told and people are thrown away.

    Unwanted souls wander the earth in despair of their loved ones they once loved.

    Blackness falls as dusk draws near and Death rises up from the depths of the dark underworld, and learks in the shadows of the night.

    All is well as dawn draws near, and the morning glories come alive.

    Dew on the morning grass moistens Death's cloak as he wanders about the neighborhood, as sunlight shines on his pale blue eyes, all is well and all is normal.




    Submitted on 2005-09-04 07:13:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unwanted souls wander the earth in despair of their loved ones they once loved

    this line couls be changed im not sure how but it doesnt really go together...but overall i liked it, but there was no structure at all and i dont like that, but i enjoyed reading it...

    ~adalae
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. The flow as a little off, and you should have used stronger words for such a meaningful piece. BUt overall is was a great piece. Keep up the good work.

    >:D
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]



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