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    dots Submission Name: growing teendots

    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Looking for comments of any sort. I was in a very deep searching inside of me mood. Just life you know but it would be nice to have input for this.

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    dotsgrowing teendots

    This is a simple day of a teenagers life
    so many influences and so many things not nice
    They look around they notice things
    They start seeing nothing is what it seems
    Nobody could ever get them ready for this
    Nothing could have ever made them experience this
    So many losses and yet again so many gains
    Start seeing the world through different eyes
    Growing wiser every minute
    Growing stronger of soul in no time
    Starting to see what real life is
    Starting to wittness how they got to be
    Some say its too much pressure
    Some choose to give up
    But the most succesful is the person who kept up
    And for myself as i experience this
    I realize that I too am a growing teen

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      i really enjoyed this even tho the rhyming ans structure was off, it really captured what its like to grow up and to be a teen and how unprepared we are..i really enjoyed it, keep writing

    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      yet another good poem by josymanthegreat! well lets see since i cant say anything bad about since it was so awesome i love it. and every word is true seeing u kno my life but yea it was really good and in depth about everything. i like these kinda poems. goodjob
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has marlvelous rythym. I put it to music (like I do everything I read), and it was just perfect. I look forward to seeing more of your poems in the future.

    Much Love,
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by xmangaXfreakx | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this poem was pretty good, i havn't read one quite like it yet. What you said in it is so true. I really liked:

    "Nobody could ever get them ready for this
    Nothing could have ever made them experience this"

    Most people steryotype teens to be all the same...dramatic, depressed over stupid things...etc. but we all have different lives and different expiriences. Great write!
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      i hate being a teen! its sucks butt! no nothing is like it seems i could feel the emotion in this poem! a lot! and its like u think ur doing on thing rite and then its not! good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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