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Wait Till The End

Author: Mia
ASL Info:    17/F/MD
Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 103 /123 /52
Words: 214
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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Wait Till The End

She lays there, on her bed
Exhausted from all this dread
Tears stain her pillow case
As she smothers her hands onto her face

The feeling in her mind, it stresses her out
Fills her with sorrow, depression, and doubt
She feels so betrayed and alone
It seems as though she's bad luck prone

These feelings she works so hard to not show
Are caused by her allies instead of her foes
She loves them too much, forgives them too fast
Everything will be find, but of course that won't last

When things were improving, it wasn't a fact
But then the sadness surprised her from the back
She wasn't ready for it, she was still recovering
From the last ordeal that caused her much suffering

She thought her friends loved her and she loved them as much
But maybe "I love you" is just a good finishing touch
Instead of her usual bright side, she's full of pessimism
For none of this had she ever envisioned

She wished for one friend to stand by her through and through
But for her, wishes don't ussually come true
Will she ever be loved? Will she find a good friend?
It's an unpredictable future, so we'll just wait till the end...

Submitted on 2005-09-04 10:10:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  yeah, i agree with the others, a very good write, very good rhyming skills, damn, i cant do that, lol, yeah, i can relate, this was very intense, yeah, friends suck, its so hard to get over it, and forgiving ppl too fast is a big problemo, the whole poem is good, i cant pick my fav line, kudos!
| Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved it i loved i loved it., this is going on my favorites list. a few years ago i was going through the exact same thing. it never did work out between me and my friends time went by they actually got worse though so i cant wait to see how this turns out.

| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved this poem.I LOVED IT! I am going through something EXACTLY like this RIGHT now.I sit and cry about it all the time,wondering why...if they'll ever come back to me and love me as much as they USED to.DEFINATLY a favorite.I am VERY...EXTREMELY....glad I picked this poem out to read it!
| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds like a sequel could be in the offing here ! It would be interesting to find out what happens. A good write and I enjoyed reading it.
| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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