Description: This is another of my blathes, as somedaysam. This is the moment I was referring to in *you*, my second submission. The following is my entire post from Blather, I don't know why I included the first part, but I figured I would leave it whole.
homosexual
home
sex
some
some
home
sex
male
slam
lame
lash
hose
hoes
hos
ho
ho
ho
my mom is a homosexual
i think i may be too
cause there's this girl
who i could love
when i first saw her
she was all barefoot and denim and tight green knapp's ford baseball t-shirt in the Subway parking lot
walking towards me like sunshine slipping across a sleepy lake
and I wanted to kiss her there
in front of the Subway and ChinaRose cafe and take her home and lay her under the stars in the backyard on a worn pink and white blanket and whisper
you could be the first girl i've ever loved or some cheesey line but really meant it sincerely
I loved the way this made me feel. I've loved a girl once and it was adorable. I love how you would take her home and whisper in her ear that she is the 1st girl you ever loved. I adore that. amazing. Lesbains I highly adore.
I really like this. The beginning was alright but the rest of it was love.
this was an interesting piece. I can say I've never read anytging like this. That begining confused me, but then again I'm alittle on the slow side, so yeah... I don't know where I was going with that. lol Anyway umm nice write and keep up the awesomness
there's this girl who i could love when i first saw her she was all barefoot and denim and tight green knapp's ford baseball t-shirt in the Subway parking lot walking towards me like sunshine slipping across a sleepy lake and I wanted to kiss her there in front of the Subway and ChinaRose cafe and take her home and lay her under the stars in the backyard on a worn pink and white blanket and whisper you could be the first girl i've ever loved or some cheesey line but really meant it sincerely
i loved all these lines. being a lover of women myself, i could see it all in my mind's eye. very romantic and sensual. the beginning part i didn't really like as much. i think the part about the girl though could stand on it's own as a very sweet poem. thanks for sharing!
homosexual home sex some home sex male slam lash hose hoes hos ho ho ho
just something you might want to look into. i didn't really like the wordplay at the beginning, but the "ho"'s were a great lead in into the true meat of the piece. i wasn't expecting the rawness that followed the wordplay and it was like taking in a deep breath of 2am winter air, where you feel like your lungs will freeze but you do it anyway for the sensation. the end line ... i liked all of it, but i feel like it could benefit from one more thought, but it's fine as is. i'm really glad you decided to drive by comment me and such, i love this. thanks for sharing. =]
wow. well, uh huh ok I have never been able to formulate words, but I am speechless... Ok, maybe not. I am not into that scene at all, but the write was good... reminiscent of figment, a piece that I wrote, check it out if you get a chance... Very Beautifully written, but I can't say I like the subject too much. nuttin but luv 4 u ORA
i liked this a lot. your description of taking this girl home was very sweet and reminded me of being a young teenager in love with my first girl. in fact, if you check my site, i wrote about her in "my first girl" and in "at seventeen." thanks for this sweet trip down memory lane. the firt part i didn't really get, but that's okay. i still liked it!
Because it's catching? Or in the jeans? (sic) This is cleverly done and the narrative part is super, descriptive and picture painting vivid. Taboo dealt with in a slick yet empathetic way. K
well this poem is pretty good and actually i am in fact bi-sexual and as a guy it's hard to admit it and as a girl it is too but yes if you are it's best to know i'm not sure if the meaning was you wondering whether or not you were but if that was the meaning ask your self each time you look at someone through what view you see them
This seems like real raw emotional stuff to me. Its like your professing this to someone and you just make it seem so genuine and honest about it. Its a strange kind of beauty that attaches itself to this poem. ~Aaron
I think that there are a lot of women out there who can say they have felt a pull of attraction to another...at least if they were honest...makes good fantasy fodder, at the very least! *s*
Submission Name: homosexual
