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    dots Submission Name: there will never be a tomorrowdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       this is about our human condition in relation to our enviroment and our need to come to a realization of that relationship. power (plants) can be read two ways and symbolizes the struggle we have with our man made environment and nature.


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    there will never be a tomorrow and always
    there will never be a yesterday even
    though we dream dreams of
    them

    so thinking we think we know now
    and thinking we know how now
    because we think we think
    we dream on

    our heads full of cosmos clashing
    and little tiny atoms smashing
    we make great rules for all
    us fools

    yes god said all is for us he did
    even though he is not a he or
    a she but maybe even a you
    or me

    thus so in our powerful god hands
    we can do create all many things
    to make us go faster live longer
    god like

    and woe be to all that stands against
    our mighty power(plants) doing
    some sort battle for our
    very so breath

    and there will never be a tomorrow always
    and there will never be a yesterday even
    though we dream dreams of
    them




    Submitted on 2005-09-04 16:10:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2011-12-22 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an interesting piece and style. I like how you bring out we are god like but we use that power in the wrong way.

    Thanks for sharing! Have a great day with lots of creative smiles to share :-)
    | Posted on 2011-12-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      dream or not, it's as real as you feel -- is there a today?
    the rhythm's rocky, but you had some good imagery.

    so thinking we think we know now
    and thinking we know how now
    because we think we think
    we dream on

    this stanza needs work, unless you were trying to make a confused effect. just my opinion anyway.
    | Posted on 2008-12-19 00:00:00 | by Myopic | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree w/ the conqueror, this poem makes u want more id like to dwell in this little pocket of space that this piece drew me into a little longer.
    peace
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by unclerob | [ Reply to This ]
      I would like to reccomend a book that closely relates to your cause... Ishmael. It's fiction, but it has a strong underlying environmental theme and is definately worth the read! This poem left me thoughtful. Perhaps it could be longer with a few more stanzas in there somewhere. In actuality, of course, it comes down to your own preferance. Well done.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2008-09-02 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you for writing this I understand what your trying to say i agree with you keep writing more of this I love it peace be with you my friend
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      i really didn't like this one too much. u repeated urself a few times. it seemed a lil vague, maybe i didn't understand it the way u meant it 2 be understood. i liked the message u were trying 2 send though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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