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    dots Submission Name: Genevievedots

    Author: She Is Insane
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 40/60/32
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Romance
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    I could write you dozens of love letters;
    I could kiss you under the moonlight
    (the moon as our witness).
    I can slowly undress you under my room light,
    (leaving nothing to hide)
    hands running up and down mountains of flesh.

    But you, you don't believe in love.

    I could whisper in your ear: love poems
    (or perhaps passages from Danielle Steel's novels).
    I could slide my hands up and down your body,
    As slow music pours out of the radio.
    We could sing along to love classics from Bobby Vinton.

    But you don't believe in love songs.

    You think,
    Things such as love and lust
    Shouldn't mingled together.

    So this is -- this is just a fuck.

    Naked legs, lost virginities, and drunk souls
    Lost in a turmoil of evening events,
    That's your opinion of love.

    I could sketch your name and mine in the sand,
    With a heart in the middle
    But it would diminished on sand and ocean.
    It would be but a meaningless act of
    a b s u r d i t y to you;
    An act of helpfulness.

    You don't believe in romance.
    You laugh at romance and love, alike.

    We could disappeared in an obscured closed room,
    your hands on me.
    Our scents mixed together in the air.

    Everything is lost between you and I.

    Submitted on 2005-09-04 17:15:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well I can't relate to this either which is a good thing. I don't have a problem with sex before marriage that much unless people are doing it on a regular basis and there's no love it's just for the sex. That's when I disagree. So yea dump this person or try to change their mind cause it doesn't seem like a good relationship to keep. Thats just my opinion though. Any ways about the write, I think this really shouldn'y be considered lyrics. I wouldn't really consider this poetry it seems more like thoughts and poetry kind of mixed. The rhythm and flow were ok not the best but were still ok. Umm otherwise thats all I had to say. This was an interesting thing to write about though.

    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
      I cannot relate to this... but whoever he is.. DUMP HIM ... I believe in God.. and thus I don't believe in lust without love.. without marriage...
    I couldn't keep with the flow and rhythm.. maybe its better outloud

    Write ON
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]

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