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    dots Submission Name: Chicken PT1dots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 994
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 390



    Description:
       This one is about the life of a chicken... yeah im bored


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    dotsChicken PT1dots
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    Around everything is dark, and Everything is getting scary
    Starting to peck a way out, finally witnessing light feeling merry
    A quick stare to where I came from, where i was concieled until now
    Now out of there starting to see the world
    it is so vast and neat
    i dont have to be trapped again
    and now have a better place to live... or so i think....




    Submitted on 2005-09-04 19:23:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, boredom has its advantages. This poem was cute. I liked the twist at the end. Poor chicken, but I can;'t really talk. I eat 'em too. :P
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      My wonderful cousin on here jessie thomas, she has this theory...

    Chickens are gonna take over the world and kill everyone with more toes than them. And she can tell you more on that.

    This was great.

    Jaz
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is weird! But I like it anyway. I gotta say, I feel sorry for the chicken. He's in for a suprise about the world.
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
      ive never seen a poem like this b4. its kinda odd but i liked it. it seems to have alot of depth to it. thats always a good thing to my point of view.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by lil_gh0st_girl | [ Reply to This ]


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