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    dots Submission Name: FOREVERdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       no clue how to describe this one i guess it comes from a feeling of being trapped

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    Its strange being without you ,my world is black and dead.
    I am forever pushed .I long to rip open ,to burst from this human shell.
    There are no words that come to me no fence to keep me.
    There is no shelter from the visions.
    I beg to be forgiven ,to be taken from the insanity.
    Help me someone please.
    The cold steel is inviting.
    Blood on silver.
    It makes me warmly smile.

    Submitted on 2005-09-05 22:04:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is one of the many poems that i personally feel would sound great sang over the right music, it is very short and to the point and would translate well into lyrics.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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