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    dots Submission Name: AUGUST NIGHTdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAUGUST NIGHTdots
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    I sometimes go for moonlight walks down roads long ago closed.
    I stumble far from the beaten path to a field dried and brown.
    I strip away my mortal binds and lie amongst the tall grasses.
    With only a starry sky to cover me I ponder the weight of the world.
    Each night always ends the same way .
    A hot shower burning my skin an ugly pink .
    I watch the dirt leave my hands and collect in muddy puddles at my feet .




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      I liked this, it's short and it leaves the reader thinking. I also like how I could picture everything. Really good write :)

    ~javajunkie
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by javajunkie | [ Reply to This ]
      Very visual piece, and that's what i liked about this, continue to write, there is something to be said about those that can take the reader to another plain.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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