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    dots Submission Name: my stolen delightdots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsmy stolen delightdots
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    I was so happy, now I'm sad
    I was conten, but now I'm mad
    True happiness, something I've never had
    But there are periods, in which I am glad
    But those points in time are far apart.
    It rips a hole inside my heart.
    A Gaping hole, It's sad but true
    Who knows exactly what goes through.
    It doesn't matter anymore
    I am numb now, but I was sore
    NOw its all ok you see?
    Because my soul is plainly free
    It seems the thing for which I would fight
    Has turned out to be my stolen delight




    Submitted on 2005-09-05 22:18:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a little confusing to me but in another way it makes sense. i feel that it oly needs a little clairification.it actually sounds as if the person is no longer here. if this is the case then it needs to be said.
    erin
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by devonsmom03 | [ Reply to This ]
      really good poem but could use some work on the rhyming of it and its a little confusing but it wasn't :S but other than that really great you show great promise and i agree wiv Suicidalchild51 you'll go far

    izzi x
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm...I didnt understand this...but then again i did...u get it?But i liked the rhyming thing...i need to steal some of the rhymes from you...your the friggn best at the whole poem thing...ur gonna make it big...i know it...

    ¤XxXSuicidalxxChildXxX¤
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good, i myself am not a perfect poet, so i believe everyone can improves themselves, there is always something better in you, so i believe anyone in the arts should challenge themselves.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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