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    dots Submission Name: Nakedly we comedots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Does this make you think you want to be with your (a) lover?


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    dotsNakedly we comedots
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    Nakedly we come together
    The teeming world not knowing or caring about us;
    Even the cosmos filled with its atoms and stars,
    Is no matter for us.
    And all the yesterdays and all the tomorrows
    Have no meaning for us,
    For we are given to each other,
    Sharing all that is well and true;
    And we are akin to all those lovers
    Who have ever been, are, or will be
    As we come together nakedly




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 01:28:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It did make me wish my lover were here with me
    | Posted on 2013-12-22 00:00:00 | by Teofila | [ Reply to This ]
      I do want to be with my lover. I really like this poem because it really just makes me think of how me and my bf are. This poem makes me think of how we are when we are together. Nice poem I hope to see more in the future!
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this poem very much. Do continue to write. I also feel that more could be added to this poem because there is so much more feeling of this kind of sensuality, but it's your poem. I loved it a lot.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by SexyRomeo | [ Reply to This ]
      This can be described in a much more sensual way in my opinion, I feel you could put more layers into this piece, but I can say that you should continue to write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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