Description: Just updated, (Hopefully) got all the spelling mistakes, Thanks to all who pointed the mistakes out to me... Mostly I don’t have time to think about spelling/punctuation… I’m always keeping a vigilant eye out for the boss… If he catches me writing poetry instead of doing work… Well it won’t be pretty lol. Well thanks for all the comments… I hope to write more soon.
Political Garbage -------------------------------------------
Corrupt politicians
Rats with ambition
Eyes red like blood
They sit and chatter
Subjects come up
People don't matter
Greedy ambitions
Money making schemes
Distinct in-decisions
Deceit and denial
Subject to renewal
Document filing
Pencil pushers
Demonic inhibitions
Parole and probation
Subject to change
Terms and conditions
The wallow away
Live life day by day
Nibble at cheese
Then file it away
Attract many flies
Eat shit never die
Always make mistakes
And never know why...
oh my god Tony Blair is the worst, and so is Gordon Brown, selling the British soul to Bush for half- price. Lies and schemes and just a load of s*** all the damn time. I hate them. This is good, I likle this poem, very amusing imagery there of Tony and his ratty little friends. Thanks xxx
nice take on the politicians .. damn politicians and their cheese eating fat faces ... damn them .. umh anyways. THe whole dirty ratty , waddling pack image fit the politician perfectly
I dunno , by your introduction, if you want the spelling errors pointed out .. since I sometimes brush over poems and miss a mistake however .. i'll just briefly mentioned the ones I saw going over it ;
sorry if i made it hard for you not specifying the lines the words are in .. to lazy .. heh .. this is a wickedly satirical piece .. tidy it up and it could look pretty hot ..
okay, interesting. Not really sure what to comment upon this only that it reminded me of a piece i wrote about some politicians but not really sure if it applies perfectly to it yet still it reminded me of it. "soldier of ignorance". Tell me if it applies to it.
Anyhow, the things you said in the description are so totally correct so i don't need to point out the wrongs you have in the piece.
If i look at it in a political kinda way, you are looking at it too negatively unless you work in politics and know how things are being operated instead of just stating the myths most people say about politicians. I don't think that most people are like that. It's only one person or a group made a mistake and thought they could get away with things or lied and stuff like that that created this sort of reputation. Groups of people who are related to a sort of field tend to be judged like that. Oh well.
Overall, loved the thoughts you had in mind. Would of been better if you didn't have any line breaks cause when you went into another stanza, you still haven't completed the idea in the previous stanza which made it kinda look bad. But no biggy in the end since you say it's a draft. MUst check the poem and tell me what you think. I'm not sure if it completely relates but i'm sure you can tell me.
Take care till next time we meet. Loved the title by the way. Very original yet still a bit offensive and still very true. lol
Submission Name: Political Garbage
