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    dots Submission Name: Sadnessdots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    27/F/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 305/260/57
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Today is my fall apart day...my son will have to have surgery, and I know that you have to think the best but the dark cloud has covered me today, or maybe this has all just caught up to me. He is just so small and I haven’t even had him to myself yet.
    I want to thank Magnicat for the poem Hope, every time it seems to cloud up I think of Hope in her yellow rain coat with apple pie and it makes me feel like I can do this...so thank you Cat.


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    dotsSadnessdots
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    To much to carry,
    And I begin to stumble.
    How can happiness
    So quickly change her tune?
    Now I'm tied
    As I sit back and watch it unfold
    I'm useless
    I'm tired
    I want to do more
    But there is no more to do.
    I have to trust
    In Him
    But to me right now
    The unseen seems so detached
    But I have no time to question this
    It has just always been.
    I've begun to question myself...
    And I feel so responsible,
    I don’t feel like I have the strength to handle this
    And I'm wanting to hide until this has ended
    But there she stands
    Hope
    And I know that if I could stand beside her
    Maybe my courage would come out of hiding
    And I could find my strength
    To make it though
    My sadness.




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 07:08:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the way you embody the emotions, and explain your train of thoughts. i also like the imagery of stumbling under the weight.
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by Laura Black | [ Reply to This ]
      you are a very courageous woman Denise, and you have been through so much with your son in such a short time. you have strength you probably didn't even know you had, but i know it is hard and you seem to sag under the weight of it all. i am glad that Hope has given you comfort in your times of pain and that she can be a beacon for you. you and Dougie are always in my thoughts and prayers, and i will go light a candle for him at the church today. you will get through this, trust in God to help you and to keep Dougie safe and sound.

    love and prayers always,
    ~Cat&Hope
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Funny how you say that your courage is hiding when I have viewed nothing but one hell of a courageous woman and mother in this write.

    Sometimes the hardest thing to do is to believe in the unseen...but just like air though we do not see Him we still live...

    My prayers are with you, your husband and your Angel today...

    T
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I am sorry for your personal situation. The poem definitely expresses the emotional rollercoaster you are on at the moment. while I know it may seem cliché, rest assured God is aware of your need. Trusting in Him, regardless of the outcome is what faith is all about.

    You touched a lot of hearts with this write. Please feel free to drop in on my page and read some encouragement in regard to faith.

    Greg
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      I know you dont say what kind of surgery,but i can relate to this emotional write.My own son had surgery at 5 yrs old and the feelings of helplessness,anxiety and tiredness you portray here are well known to me.I am very moved by this write and i will pray for you that all will be well.Hope is a great friend in these times,as are family and friends
    god bless,be strong
    graham
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work mate.

    You must have a friend/family member/person from oppisite gender who is under depression and you either did something to her/him, or you feel like you've done something him/her but you don't know what.

    But the last few lines also gives a hint that you must like this person, you want to ask them out but you don't have the courage to do so.

    the poem was quite good, but I felt as if it repeated it self.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by testerfella | [ Reply to This ]



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