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    dots Submission Name: Wish I'd Neverdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I wish it had never happened... I wouldn't have to still love him.


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    dotsWish I'd Neverdots
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    I wish I'd never fallen in love,
    But I always was the one to bend.
    I knew if my heart was ever captured,
    That would be the end.
    I wish I'd never kissed your lips,
    Should have never tasted you.
    I knew I'd do it too much.
    I knew I'd love it, too.
    I wish I'd never looked into your eyes,
    They took my very soul.
    If only I knew then
    The things that I now know.
    I wish I'd never given you
    That precious gift I kept so long.
    But my stupid heart kept telling me
    Something this good can't be wrong.
    I wish I'd never fallen in love
    Cause we were never meant to be.
    I wish I could have ignored my heart,
    And kept that piece of me.




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 10:45:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First, let me just say I'm a huge fan of your writing...something about your words...they hit somewhere for me...and this write...even though I'm so happy with the love of my life..and I don't know where I'd be if we hadn't fallen in love, I still feel what you're saying here. Nothing is easy...nothing is perfect...and sometimes..I think everyone just goes...God, it would be so much easier if he had never kissed me, or touched me, if I had never given him my heart. I know I've done it. But in the end, I'm hoping it's going to be so worth it. Great job..AGAIN! ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I really really loved this one! This poem was so heart-breaking. It was written so perfectly, you have actually taken thoughts right out of my mind. I just love how you captured these feelings so immencely and put them into words. This was definately a captivating piece and I think that you have some realy talent. Keep up the fantastic work! I can't wait to read more of your poems!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really well written, I can totally relate to it. Believe me, when I read this, I thought you were writing about me. But in reality, this can be about anyone whos had their heart broken. It's so powerful, and it just comes from the heart. I don't know what happened between you and "him", but it happened. No matter how many times a day you wish that you'd have made a different decision about him, or how often that you act like nothing ever happened, it happened. You just have to learn to live with it. Don't dwell on all the bad things that happened, take all of the good memories, and live on with those. Sorry about the rant, but I hope you'll come to realize that people always make decisions that they regret one point or another in their life, you just have to learn to deal with the results that come from the decisions.
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful. I really like your work, this poem flows with a deep meaning. Its a shame that the person within the poem regrets giving away part of their heart, after all giving the part away must be such a hard thing to do, so to wish to take it back leaves a feeling of pain and suffering. Keep puttin ur pieces on!

    - Rz
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]


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