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    dots Submission Name: "Last Cry"dots

    Author: Martin S. Allen
    ASL Info:    33 male
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 671/237/43
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       dernier cri (last cry) means the latest thing, the newest fashion. This is a piece about how some people only live in the fantasy world of T.V. and soon forget there own lives and ambitions. Also about the media circus in general.

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    dots"Last Cry"dots

    We long to be like them
    we stalk, we starve, we binge and purge
    to satisfy this lethal urge
    All for love or rites of passage
    we shed our blood among the masses
    dernier cri, avidity, breathless adoration
    Celluloid and magazines, a constant clelebration
    of trash and mediocraty, the idols of our time
    The altar is the TV. Screen, when will we draw the line?
    the paparazzi show a piece of what we'd like to see
    The camara eye, does it lie? or does it set us free?
    The circus of the media, oh! how it entertains!
    we long to see the drama, the heartache and the pain
    We live our lives from day to day, our miserable existence
    disconnected, disembodied out there in the distance

    Submitted on 2005-09-06 12:46:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice flow
    | Posted on 2007-09-08 00:00:00 | by Lost-Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      now this one is better than radio friendly... it doesnt bring out any of that combativeness in me...

    anyways this rings very true on so many levels and all i have to say is bravo - nicely done

    PEACE and LOVE, greg
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well put together and capturing the true essence of the plastic lifes we are exposed to on a daily basis.

    Clever word usage and imagery.

    My only suggestion would be to try and eliminate the repetition of "oh!" in line 11 and then immediately in line 12 again. It detracts a bit from the effect it has in the first usage.

    Other than that - great poem!
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a poem I can really connect to. The voyuerism, the worship of celebrities... all in there.

    When will we draw the line?

    I also loved the structure of this, and it was very riotous. Revolution anyone?
    | Posted on 2005-12-13 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]
      A very true poem

    The world needs to expressits love and admiration for its fellow man
    Not some guy who makes 3 million dollars to hawk a product none of us really need

    Lets say theres a young child who ran in the way of a buss to protect another child

    Is this child not a hero

    Remember folks money dont mean everything
    A calm and loving heart does

    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Yup its a good poem its show about sadness of this wworld about "did we hit because we hit, did we kill because we killed? Did it really will end the war" nice tough you r rockz m8
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is what we as non celebrities feel. it takes us to what we would like to be as well as the money we would like to see. very good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by devonsmom03 | [ Reply to This ]
      The great thing about this is...you read it, you think about it, then you read it again. And you decide then if you like it, which I do. I think that your point is completely valid...so much truth here it is hard not to like.Good job...I feel silly telling you good job, you are so much older than I...bah.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a piece that was very impactful and meaningful. It hits a social nerve about our addictions to the boob tube and most of the meaningless dribble on there an insult to our own intelligence, the way people need to see others pain, misery, etc. and how life is ad driven.
    You have great talent to highlight situations and to give the reader reason to stop and think.
    Great job!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This, as most of your poetry, has a strong and deliberate message. I am glad that you are expanding your grounds by writing new things (which, I must say, come out extremely well).
    The work meant to me that the public, fedishes, T.V., and beautiful people are made like idols to worship. Our whole mindset is focused on what they are doing and how we can do it to.
    Good write.
    Janelle (The Conqueror)
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading this poem. It focuses on todays problems,

    a constant clelebration
    of trash and mediocraty, the idols of our time
    The altar is the TV. Screen

    I really liked these lines as is contrasts what should be worshiped at the altar, but instead its TV, and how this is taking over our lives. When will we draw the line? The question to end all questions?

    Great stuff.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is really good cause this poem is so true...great use of questioning...it would be intresting to see if someone famous would take offense to this:D lol. anyway good topic it's used alot but you really made it your own.
    nice flow.
    | Posted on 2005-10-26 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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