Immortal Forever More -------------------------------------------
The many years that have passed
are the only ones that share the heartache
that share the pain of loss
the pain of forever more guilt and anger
with only myself.
They spread in the early opening
hoping to cheer for the new life
but slowly drain to nothing byt the end.
The lost are never to return
but I forever linger in this world
where I am immortal
and never seem to die
never seem to disappear
never seem to fly away.
My fingers are numb to the earth
Nothing ever changes
the cold is warm
the hot is warm
I am neutral
neutral from others
neutral from life
neutral from fear.
The age never catches me
the human lasts 'til it's dawning
the plant falters by the ending of the season
and I am forever and nothing more.
I gain control of nothing
I take over nothing
the being of me is abstract
the feeling of me is nearly liquid
but I have no water
only the ground beneath my imaginary feet
is what I am missing.
Time is an essential
only the gifted ones pursue it
the life of it is secret
the heart of it is buried
in the core of the Earth.
The many years that have passed are the only ones that share the heartache that share the pain of loss the pain of forever more guilt and anger with only myself.
They spread in the early opening hoping to cheer for the new life but slowly drain to nothing byt the end.
The lost are never to return but I forever linger in this world where I am immortal and never seem to die never seem to disappear never seem to fly away.
these para were wonderful, it had a specific meaning and that to very properly discribed, these para were very deep maybe they touched most deepest part in my heart. i have been lonely for years since in the beigning i was a foolish child who knew nothing about things, so i was not a very invited guest among my own relatives. and for some years i am not liked by people since now i have maybe more knowdgle then them. Well this is the hard part of the world, sometimes i feel like people are just looking for excusess to avoid me. the only one who accepts me without any condition is darkness.
Well my friend i want to point out i am sorry if it hurts you.
but the para that i mentioned and the para after these donont seem to match. well i mean the first 3 para are about your relation with years, and the para after them are relating to the immortal thing. ANd after reading first 3 para when moved further the the other para were not that deep or maybre not not deep. those para were not at all relating. maybe you can change the first 3 or the last ones
I likey this poem especially My fingers are numb to the earth Nothing ever changes the cold is warm the hot is warm I am neutral neutral from others neutral from life neutral from fear. very simular to my type of poem keep up the good work peace & stay safe...
Submission Name: Immortal Forever More
