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    dots Submission Name: Immortal Forever Moredots
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    Author: Desser
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 89/95/44
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsImmortal Forever Moredots
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    The many years that have passed
    are the only ones that share the heartache
    that share the pain of loss
    the pain of forever more guilt and anger
    with only myself.

    They spread in the early opening
    hoping to cheer for the new life
    but slowly drain to nothing byt the end.

    The lost are never to return
    but I forever linger in this world
    where I am immortal
    and never seem to die
    never seem to disappear
    never seem to fly away.

    My fingers are numb to the earth
    Nothing ever changes
    the cold is warm
    the hot is warm
    I am neutral
    neutral from others
    neutral from life
    neutral from fear.

    The age never catches me
    the human lasts 'til it's dawning
    the plant falters by the ending of the season
    and I am forever and nothing more.

    I gain control of nothing
    I take over nothing
    the being of me is abstract
    the feeling of me is nearly liquid
    but I have no water
    only the ground beneath my imaginary feet
    is what I am missing.

    Time is an essential
    only the gifted ones pursue it
    the life of it is secret
    the heart of it is buried
    in the core of the Earth.




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 14:27:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The many years that have passed
    are the only ones that share the heartache
    that share the pain of loss
    the pain of forever more guilt and anger
    with only myself.

    They spread in the early opening
    hoping to cheer for the new life
    but slowly drain to nothing byt the end.

    The lost are never to return
    but I forever linger in this world
    where I am immortal
    and never seem to die
    never seem to disappear
    never seem to fly away.

    these para were wonderful, it had a specific meaning and that to very properly discribed, these para were very deep maybe they touched most deepest part in my heart.
    i have been lonely for years since in the beigning i was a foolish child who knew nothing about things, so i was not a very invited guest among my own relatives.
    and for some years i am not liked by people since now i have maybe more knowdgle then them. Well this is the hard part of the world, sometimes i feel like people are just looking for excusess to avoid me.
    the only one who accepts me without any condition is darkness.

    Well my friend i want to point out i am sorry if it hurts you.

    but the para that i mentioned and the para after these donont seem to match.
    well i mean the first 3 para are about your relation with years,
    and the para after them are relating to the immortal thing.
    ANd after reading first 3 para when moved further the the other para were not that deep or maybre not not deep.
    those para were not at all relating. maybe you can change the first 3 or the last ones

    if it hurted then i am very sorry to write it


    bye
    nishant
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      I likey this poem especially
    My fingers are numb to the earth
    Nothing ever changes
    the cold is warm
    the hot is warm
    I am neutral
    neutral from others
    neutral from life
    neutral from fear.
    very simular to my type of poem keep up the good work peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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