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    dots Submission Name: I thought Id.. .dots

    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    21.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 238/273/176
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Me
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    dotsI thought Id.. .dots

    I thought Id live forever
    in the arms of the wind
    the hold of the ice king
    the dreams
    that Id give.
    I thought I run
    on tidal waves
    and drink the worlds
    I thought Id
    fall in love
    and place the graves above.
    But I cant see that happening
    I dont know the way.
    I cant take the path
    again, that will lead me into the day.
    Its only for a moment
    the freedom
    and the pain.
    I thought of all my loneliness
    and Im not afraid
    I have to many around me
    but Im always alone
    Id thought Id live forever
    but I melted just like the snow.

    Submitted on 2005-09-06 18:07:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this piece makes me think of the fact that life is only temporary, and that people try to ignore that fact.....kind of depressing.....knowing that I have to die and there is nothing I can do about it....you should read some of my stuff you might like it
    | Posted on 2005-09-27 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this piece! I thought it was absolutely awsome! The visual was great and it flowed so smoothly. The last part was my favorite when you wrote
    "Id thought Id live forever
    but I melted just like the snow"
    that part just got me!
    Great work, can't wait to read more!
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG i loved this peice, i don't know why though, i really don't. just the way you used the words and put them together was great.
    I like the style you have put it in, i think it really makes thes peice better because it isn't in the normal way, it is different, and i love originality. And the imagry you have put into theis peice is great! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by samyalone | [ Reply to This ]

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