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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    laying here tonight
    all my past mistakes seemingly haunting me
    my beautiful disaster has finally come of age
    im screaming out again,,im stuck in this fantasy escape

    a persons falling,,listen you hear my scream
    call out wildly to the setting sun
    run little boy,,run

    im impossible to ignore
    i dont no how to settle a score?
    my heart is so full
    its swelling my love

    this blazing line is being crossed
    my faith has so seemingly been lost
    i just cant comprehend the simple magic in my head
    ill bend not break for you again




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 18:17:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Continue with your poetry, the more you write the better you'll get. Yeah, the flow could be better, but you must make sure that you choose the right structure to suit what you are describing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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