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    dots Submission Name: starry nightdots
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    Author: samyalone
    ASL Info:    17/f/my room
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 93/67/18
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsstarry nightdots
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    starry night
    taking flight
    yell and scream
    broken dream

    wait for dawn
    feel withdrawn
    hurt and pain
    falling rain

    seeing blood
    mixed with mud
    start to cry
    wonder why

    starry night
    taking flight
    yell and scream
    broken dream...




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 20:19:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this piece was pretty good. The imagery was good, but maybe it could have been a bit more descriptive. Other than that I liked it, I enjoyed reading! Keep up the good work!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sad poem with good visuals... I thought it was ok the rhythim was in a good pace and the wording was fantastic... it let me see and feel emotions with very little words and it drew a picture for me... however it was sort of confusing and I didnt get the meaning the first time i read it... keep writting though and good luck
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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