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    dots Submission Name: Impossible Distancesdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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       It's hard to see, isn't it? Go on. Let your guard down.


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    Last September feels very far away. An entire year away. Almost exactly twelve months, approximately forty-eight weeks, three hundred-sixty-four days. One seventeenth of my life! And in those passing days, I learned about distances. Great canyons between people, caverns of hurt, deep voids made of dark pain. The kind of distances that make it seem that the person you should be closest to feels miles away. Or the closing space as you start a new friendship, the crushed feeling of romance, attachment of best friends, awkward knowledge about your former boyfriend or girlfriend--that you still hang out with. Impossible distances. Ones that, to people our age, appear to be infinite and consistent. We conjure them into large walls and fortresses so that our pain seems smaller. We move farther and farther away from what hurts us because anguish is so consuming and—good heavens—we wouldn’t want to deal with our emotions. We just want to get them out of the way and get on with our lives, pretending it never happened. But in all honesty, most of these expanses of space are only in our minds, and can easily be widened or lessened.




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      You must be commended on every poem you write cause you are truly a great, talented, classic poet. It seems you know where to put every word. You work meticulously and with the great thoughts you become great.
    Now on to your poem
    Your right people do create vast spaces between themselves and people or between themselves and their problems. Why? Becuase they are afraid to face themselves in the mirror and look at who they really are. Their problems consume so what do they do? They run, afraid of problems yet not afraid of sin...Your vivid picture of what people our age think is right on par...we all know that the so call depressed are not really depressed they say it cause they want to be in a crowd that is recognized...they are lost among themselves. They want to be other people because they are afraid to be themselves and make a mistake. But isnt that what we are based on...in all actual fact everyone has made a mistake yet people tend to forget that no one is perfect so yet again they create space by running away from making a mistake ...you bring every last one of my thoughts to life in your poem. Your a great poet and a great person you bring realization to a table where people are only posing i can't begin to thank you enough
    Val
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice Kate(I remembered. Treasure this moment, it's rare. Lol). I can relate to learning about distance, and last too, what a coincidence.

    "Great canyons between people, caverns of hurt, deep voids made of dark pain. The kind of distances that make it seem that the person you should be closest to feels miles away. Or the closing space as you start a new friendship, the crushed feeling of romance, attachment of best friends, awkward knowledge about your former boyfriend or girlfriend--that you still hang out with. Impossible distances."

    This was by far my favorite part. I'm sure you can guess EXACTLY why. Wow. Last year sucked. It's funny though, the beginning of this year feels the same way it did last with him. Why is it that every time we think we're okay, we break down cry?

    Anyway, this year will be better, because I'm gonna make it better. See you in a few short hours. Later.
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a strong beginning and one that hold interest. The subject is intriguing I get the feeling it meanders a bit especially this line;

    “Or the closing space as you start a new friendship, the crushed feeling of romance, attachment of best friends, awkward knowledge about your former boyfriend or girlfriend-that you still hang out with.”

    I’m not sure what the closing space has to do with impossible distances so I’d be happy if you could explain.

    Also, the ending is rather abrupt. I was just getting into the mode of thinking about spaces and distance and well... it came to a screeching halt. I think it needs a more powerful finish (or at least a more powerful lingering question)

    E.g. "Oddly enough, most of these expanses of space are only in our minds, so why isn’t it easy for one to widen or lessen it?"

    Looking forward to reading more of your stuff :)

    Peace, Judy

    PS. Great artwork!
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting read. I couldn't stop reading over and over. I loved the way you have incorporated the entire idea of distances/space. Looking forward to read more of your writings.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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