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    dots Submission Name: Letter From Another Countrydots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Imagine a land civilization hasn't touched, full of purity, awaiting the same minute explorations a young lover might expect.


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    dotsLetter From Another Countrydots
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    Skimming the smooth
    belly of an ocean
    while the tumbling
    breakers crept,
    luminous as
    monastery windows
    from the salty
    tropic depths;
    an island hushed
    as regret or promise,
    ascends the mist
    of distant shores
    melting, etching
    an unhurried
    current as the
    young Columbus
    shrugs nightmares in
    the swiriling surf,
    slender as a
    trembling hope
    restored




    Submitted on 2005-09-06 21:02:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good

    What I saw in this poem was a man who at times doubted the meaning of his existence and when he looked deeply at nature he saw exactly why he was here
    Beautifully written

    Looking forward to more of your writes
    Take Care
    Ron

    And thanks for your recent comments
    Its comments like yours that keep me writing
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Eventhough I found the ebb and floww of the lines a bit hard to follow, I loved several of the turns of phrase that you used.
    "luminous as monestary windows"-this line underscores the purity that you're illustrating as well as reflecting the glassy reflection of the ocean.
    The reference to columbus also works well with unchartered lands...
    the rythmic motion and description are obviously enough that it gets transfered fro tera firma to firm Tara..lol
    jan xo
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this is so very sensuous. The purity of the untouched...

    luminous
    as monastery windows
    from the salty
    tropic depths...

    Those were my favorite lines. This is, as your previous commentor so eloquently put it, "Bloody excellent!"

    +Jo
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by whisperslove | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, all I get from this is pure erotic undertones!

    This drips sex, and is a fabulous metaphor to a young girl's purity.

    Bloody excellent!

    be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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