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    dots Submission Name: Took overdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 676
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 777



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       Its a poem about the world today... dont even know if i should call it a poem but its a something neways... please comment thank you


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    Wondering what happened, Started walking
    all I see is the world destroyed and broken
    so much war so much pain around
    Its a wonder that i dont get shot stepping out the house
    i wonder when the good in the world left and the evil took over
    now dont you think this is a good time to start over
    So many social problems so much violence sparks
    over a tiny little comment cant we talk about it now
    after what everyone went through for us we all take it granted
    What people fought over for us now we dont give a damn about it
    Freedom, liberty, and pursuit of happiness?
    You cant be free if you are fighting, you cant have liberty if all you do is fear, and happiness you cant have without peace...




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 05:13:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a good poem. I feel that it is an original poem. I agree that the world is pretty messed up right now and I feel that the author captured that.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      Well... I do relate and I do understan(for once). It a good poem, or w/e and it has meaning. But it's a little overplayed ( not the poem or w/e, but the whole idea). I mean, Yeah shure the world is screwed up but there's not much we can do anymore. And you can state the problem all you want but it only makes it worse, cuz you can only get so many people who care(and you'll never get the people you need to care, to care). I mean just dont stress over it much cuz I doubt anythings going to change anytime soon. BUt it was a good poem... or w/e.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]


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