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    dots Submission Name: White Cotton Dressdots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       Innocence destroyed.

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    dotsWhite Cotton Dressdots

    The teary-eyed reality
    Moving past her horizon
    Refuses to touch the lace
    Of her white cotton dress

    Her melancholic eyes
    Wander across fast lanes
    As bruised hands grasp
    The unnoticed wall

    The screams of silence
    Piercing her damned soul
    Invisible chains wind it self
    Around the frailty of her voice

    A sky of gray despair
    Blankets the unwanted world
    The shadows are closing in
    As light accepted its defeat

    The teary-eyed reality
    Moving past her horizon
    Splattered against the lace
    Of her white cotton dress

    Submitted on 2005-09-07 07:52:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very moving. I think I can begin to fathom the idea but it's very abstract between the lines. All except the emotions that are very vivid. It's all wrapped around one simple motive - a white cotton dress but it's really much deeper. Excellent.
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes I agree very emotional. I can relate to innocence being damaged. Same has happen to me. A very good write. I to look forward to reading more of your poems. Thank you for sharing with us. God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      At least what I get from this, is that it's one that's innocence has been taken. Rape. And if so, it's a very sad, yet truth telling of such an event. You write it well, and it's touching, as well as wrenching. I like how you kept the focus on the white cotton dress. Very nice. You write well, I hope to read more from you.

    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      If this is what I think it is about it is absolutely disturbing. I hope this is not something that has happened to you, and if so, I am very sorry. This piece was so full of sadness, it broke my heart as I read it and put a knot in my stomach. Besides the meaning of the poem, it was perfectly written. I could feel so much emotion as I read it. Great job on this piece. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]

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