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    dots Submission Name: Inside your minddots
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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       My feelings are inside me and they are here to stay


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    dotsInside your minddots
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    Inside your mind
    The grass is green,
    Inside my mind
    You always win.

    Some things are better left behind
    With no simplicity for fun,
    Some souls are better left alone
    Alone inside the lonely home.

    Tears of love, tears of fear
    I am so far away from you, too near,
    Above the sky you sleep so deep
    No fantasy for you, my king.




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 11:40:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is an interesting piece.
    very clever and well written.

    it makes you dig deeper, really makes you think of what it could mean.
    i really liked it.
    it was different, you did a good job of seperating yourself from every other writter.

    i dont think there is anything i would change. you did a great job on it-
    jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      very nicely done... shows how some peoples mind work and how others feel toward the thinker, ( if that even makes sense, lol) luck to ya
    ~rach~
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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