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    dots Submission Name: Raptor Duetdots
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    Author: Catalist
    ASL Info:    27/M/MN
    Elite Ratio:    5.05 - 20/18/10
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       A short poem which may have many meanings, written as a hopefully-comforting gesture to one who may feel alienated named Hanakia Zedek. I should mention that owls are predators that would happily eat a finch (added this cuz of 1st comment)


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    Birds of a feather flock together
    but all seek shelter in harsher weather

    Then in rejoice after the foul
    The finch sings along with the owl

    Difference aside, each with his pride
    Chests are puffed up and beaks opened wide

    Fresh water for all after the fall
    Woe is forgotten for priase of the squall




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 14:35:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Catalist [Raptor Duet]

    Chris
    You certainly have a passion for rhyme. See my latest if you want to see rhyme and mocking (cynicism/satire) – it's a technique I use when warranted.

    I question the relevance of two of your lines and also the title:
    1.“Then in rejoice after the foul” – that they sing together I can fathom, but that the finch or either would rejoice after the foul? Did you mean fowl? If you meant fowl, this then connects to my point #3!
    2.“Woe is forgotten for praise of the squall” – do the birds actually praise the squall or rejoice it's passing
    3.“raptor”: the finch is a seed eating song bird, hardly a raptor!

    Typo: praise

    Thanx, C.U. encore

    uncreaTED (Mu-Wi)
    | Posted on 2005-09-11 00:00:00 | by uncreaTED | [ Reply to This ]
      The finch sings along with the owl..?
    and
    Woe is forgotten for priase of the squall..?

    didnt really get these but in all I think its talking about how ppl that are together get along no matter how different they are

    Write on!
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Depdem | [ Reply to This ]


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