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    dots Submission Name: Ravish Medots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 938
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       Another stupid one...what the hell am I writing! What is this guy doing to me!


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    dotsRavish Medots
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    I want to ravish you
    touch you
    taste you
    feel you
    breath you.
    I want your hands
    to take mine
    and guide them
    as they explore your body,
    explore you're every part.
    I want to taste you
    from head to toe,
    taste your sweetness,
    taste your lustful thoughts.
    I want to breathe
    your every scent
    deep into my soul.
    I want to feel your excitement,
    feel you inside of me.
    I want you to take me,
    in every way,
    so deep,
    so hard,
    I want you to ravish
    and never stop...




    Submitted on 2005-09-07 16:13:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Terrific. I love passionate poems, regardless of how graphic they get. Yours is very good. I've never really thought of using the word ravish. Clever, though. Way to make something very common seem more literary. My roommate hated the word ravish. Said it made her think of eating, and associating that with intimacy made it more raw and dirty. But I have never had a problem with raw and dirty, so I don't share her dislike. Great poem.
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really really good! it descriptive. and u can tell u want this guy really bad. really good job!i woudnt really change the You's. but hey its ur poem and this is good so wat r u talkin about wat the hell r u wrting.this rocks.
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      nice to read but to many YOU's at the end, try expessing it in a way that doesn't sound so cliché' anyways maybe the other poems u written may make more sense thats my op. anyways peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was realy good. its realy descriptive and shows how much you want this guy. i can so relate because my boyfriend my right now is doing the same thing to me. i feel the same way about him.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]
      Very descriptive and to the point and again very good. Just make sure he reads what you are writing ! Again - a very good write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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